[HN Gopher] The Armed Forces Officer Chapter Twenty:  Writing an...
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       The Armed Forces Officer Chapter Twenty:  Writing and Speaking
       (1950)
        
       Author : happy-go-lucky
       Score  : 82 points
       Date   : 2021-01-25 14:35 UTC (8 hours ago)
        
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       | LanceH wrote:
       | I tried to find where it says, "No officer shall review a
       | document without requesting changes."
        
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       | jrd259 wrote:
       | How regrettable that the document has no named author, other than
       | the official sponsor. The advice stands or falls without it,
       | still one would like to know the name of the one who advocated so
       | well for clear writing.
        
       | KineticLensman wrote:
       | (1950).
       | 
       | Interesting to compare this with a 2017 equivalent [0] which
       | contains a lot more actionable guidance (written in PowerPoint).
       | 
       | A lot of this is relevant in commercial writing, e.g. the use of
       | active voice - which tends to make it clear who has
       | responsibility for things. Important in contracts, etc.
       | 
       | [0] https://www.jmu.edu/uwc/tutor-
       | resources/MSL202L15%20Writing%...
        
         | mattkrause wrote:
         | Much of the advice over active/passive voice misses the mark.
         | Decide what you want to emphasize and choose the form that does
         | so.
         | 
         | Consider some of the examples in that deck. "PVT Jones wrecked
         | the HMMWV." That's a good choice if you're describing the
         | (mis)adventures of Private Jones.
         | 
         | On the other hand "The HMMWV was wrecked by PVT Jones" might be
         | better if your argument continues with "but the problems with
         | the motor pool started long before the accident."
        
         | tyingq wrote:
         | The USAF has their "Tongue and Quill" book also:
         | https://static.e-publishing.af.mil/production/1/saf_cn/publi...
        
       | captain_price7 wrote:
       | > Men who can command words to serve their thoughts and feelings
       | are well on their way to commanding men to serve their purposes.
        
         | Terretta wrote:
         | > _"Superior qualification in the use of language, both as to
         | the written and the spoken word, is more essential to military
         | leadership than knowledge of the whole technique of weapons
         | handling."_
        
       | steve76 wrote:
       | The purpose of battle is to end it and limit the violence. The
       | natural way, as in not swimming against the tide, is to bring
       | civility to martial conflict. Military instruction on writing may
       | be inspirational to people who short change some pursuits of
       | knowledge. It may also be a giant trap, led to lure the naive and
       | adolescents to the land of I Have No Mouth and Must Scream.
       | Please do not turn everything into a special ops mission. The
       | real face of conflict is ugly, human degradation and slow motion
       | suicide that spreads across generations.
       | 
       | The article mentions Churchill, who would watch movies with naval
       | officers about Nelson and Raleigh and be moved to tears. School
       | kids today watch movies that would make him vomit or be forever
       | horrified. That's a much better emotion if you are going to led a
       | martial life. RoboCop, or Saw would be better movies to show the
       | officers of the Royal Navy. Something that really creates
       | horrific anger because of sadistic cruelty.
       | 
       | Instead of Nelson, may I direct everyone to one Eugene Fluckey,
       | who after winning the Medal of Honor, demanded a return to the
       | Pacific. His officers mandated a psychiatric assessment, which he
       | failed, due to his novel ideas of submarine mounted rocket
       | launchers, bombardments, boarding parties, and shore raiders.
       | Immediately he returned to the fight and went on to build under
       | water launched nuclear missiles. That was close to 100 years ago.
       | With the weaponization of space, on the scale of solar systems,
       | galaxies, maybe even everything, imagine what we can do to each
       | other. Awful.
       | 
       | Killing other people is never a good thing. If anything should be
       | censored, it's this, the pursuit of the martial, as in teaching
       | your children how to use fatal combat techniques and intelligence
       | on one another. They get it enough. We have enough of it in the
       | world already.
        
       | gdubs wrote:
       | This reads like it's straight from "The Art of Plain Talk", 1946.
       | [1]
       | 
       | I picked up that book over a decade ago, and it had a big effect
       | on the way I write. There's a temptation to use big words to
       | sound more professional. Part of it is understanding your
       | audience. But even when speaking to a crowd that can grasp the
       | meaning of fancier language, you risk clouding your message.
       | 
       | Feynman understood this. A big part of his brilliance was taking
       | hard ideas and making them simple.
       | 
       | My first real introduction to the idea of writing with simple,
       | clear sentences came from Cliff Stoll. People thought the
       | Cuckoo's Egg was ghostwritten. In Silicon Snake Oil he shared
       | thoughts on what made his writing so enjoyable. What I remember
       | most is simplicity. And short sentences.
       | 
       | 1:
       | https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/1862302.Art_of_Plain_Tal...
        
       | Nodraak wrote:
       | For anyone in Germany (or any country which is blocked by this
       | website), here is the raw html. Save it and open it with your
       | favorite web browser :) http://paste.awesom.eu/Y36k
        
         | macintux wrote:
         | For anyone like me who was unfamiliar with this restriction:
         | 
         | https://www.techdirt.com/articles/20180306/03423339363/proje...
        
           | commandlinefan wrote:
           | Thanks for the context - I had assumed that Germany was
           | blocking it because it pertained to the US military.
        
         | folli wrote:
         | Somehow ironic that Germany restricts access to Project
         | Gutenberg, which is named after a famous german.
        
           | watwut wrote:
           | It is other way round. Gutenberg blocks Germany.
        
             | vulcan01 wrote:
             | This is because Germany wanted Gutenberg to restrict access
             | to most of their collection, which is not in the public
             | domain in Germany. Gutenberg instead decided to block
             | Germany rather than comply with copyright law.
        
               | watwut wrote:
               | Where do you see most of their collection? Most of
               | Guttenberg collection does not have copyright claim in
               | Germany.
        
       | lailalessdad wrote:
       | https://instapage.grsm.io/lailaless8672
        
       | ckozlowski wrote:
       | My grandfather gave me some advice when I was in high school.
       | 
       | He was a radio and communications engineer from the 1950s to 80s.
       | By the time he retired, he'd worked as a program manager with a
       | staff of hundreds. His advice to me, a budding IT enthusiast and
       | likely heading for a career in such, was simple:
       | 
       | "Learn to read and write well. You can't be a good engineer if
       | you can't write well."
       | 
       | It was invaluable advice.
        
       | mcguire wrote:
       | I kind of like Chapter Three:
       | http://www.gutenberg.org/files/25482/25482-h/25482-h.htm#CHA...
       | 
       | " _There is a common saying in the services, and elsewhere, that
       | greater privileges grow out of larger responsibilities, and that
       | the latter justifies the former. This is part truth and part
       | fable._ "
       | 
       | Actually, this book looks pretty good generally.
        
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