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Subject: [patch] Linux Comparison Article fixes
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>Number:         84951
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [patch] Linux Comparison Article fixes
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       medium
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Mon Aug 15 14:00:37 GMT 2005
>Closed-Date:    Tue Aug 16 00:38:00 GMT 2005
>Last-Modified:  Tue Aug 16 00:38:00 GMT 2005
>Originator:     David Adam <zanchey@ucc.gu.uwa.edu.au>
>Release:        FreeBSD Documentation
>Organization:
University Computer Club, UWA
>Environment:
System: Linux mussel 2.6.10-1-686-smp #1 SMP Fri Mar 11 01:49:45 EST 2005
        i686 GNU/Linux
Architecture: i686

>Description:
	Dru's (excellent) article contains a couple of small grammatical mistakes I
	would like to see fixed.
>How-To-Repeat:
	- Use of numbers instead of words to indicate the volume of
	  open-source projects.

	- List of ways of finding commercial support vendors doesn't read quite
	  right, IMO.
>Fix:

See patch below:

--- linux-comparison-article.sgml.01.diff begins here ---
Index: article.sgml
===================================================================
RCS file: /home/ncvs/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/linux-comparison/article.sgml,v
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.5 article.sgml
--- article.sgml	8 Aug 2005 22:08:06 -0000	1.5
+++ article.sgml	15 Aug 2005 13:37:44 -0000
@@ -345,7 +345,7 @@
 
       <listitem><para>One of the problems associated with Open Source
         software is the sheer volume of available applications. There
-        are literally 10s of 1000s of Open Source application projects
+        are literally tens of thousands of Open Source application projects
         each with varying levels of responsiveness to security
         incidents. FreeBSD has met this challenge head-on with <ulink
         url="http://www.vuxml.org/freebsd/">VuXML</ulink>. All software
@@ -445,7 +445,7 @@
           site: <ulink
           url="http://www.freebsd.org/commercial/"></ulink></para></listitem>
 
-	<listitem><para>FreeBSDMall has been selling support contracts
+	<listitem><para>FreeBSDMall, who have been selling support contracts
 	  for nearly 10 years.
 	  <ulink url="http://www.freebsdmall.com"></ulink></para></listitem>
 
--- linux-comparison-article.sgml.01.diff ends here ---



>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: murray 
State-Changed-When: Tue Aug 16 00:37:14 GMT 2005 
State-Changed-Why:  
Thanks for the submission.  I have applied this patch in CVS and the 
website should be updated within 8 hours. 


http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=84951 
>Unformatted:
