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From: Gavin Atkinson <gavin.atkinson@ury.york.ac.uk>
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Subject: Grammar changes to freebsd-users slide
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>Number:         74624
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [patch] Grammar changes to freebsd-users slide
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Thu Dec 02 18:10:16 GMT 2004
>Closed-Date:    Sat Dec 18 15:23:35 GMT 2004
>Last-Modified:  Tue Mar 11 17:22:08 UTC 2008
>Originator:     Gavin Atkinson
>Release:        FreeBSD 5.3-RC2 i386
>Organization:
>Environment:
System: FreeBSD buffy.york.ac.uk 5.3-RC2 FreeBSD 5.3-RC2 #5: Mon Nov 1 20:13:24 GMT 2004 root@buffy.york.ac.uk:/usr/obj/usr/src/sys/BUFFY i386


	
>Description:

	Update a couple of points on the freebsd-users slide for better grammar.

>How-To-Repeat:
	N/A
>Fix:

	Patch attached. (also at http://www.devrandom.co.uk/freebsd/slides-users.diff )

--- slides-users.diff begins here ---
Index: doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /usr/cvs/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.3
diff -u -r1.3 freebsd-users.xml
--- doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml	8 Sep 2004 09:37:18 -0000	1.3
+++ doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml	2 Dec 2004 17:52:30 -0000
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
 
       <listitem>In the last year alone, about one million new FreeBSD
         hosts were counted by Netcraft, an incredible growth rate
-        despite more media attention for Linux.</listitem>
+        despite more media attention towards Linux.</listitem>
 
     </itemizedlist>
   </foil>
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@
 
     <itemizedlist>
 
-      <listitem>BSD has existed since the last 1970's and was the testbed
+      <listitem>BSD has existed since the late 1970's and was the testbed
         and reference implementation for TCP/IP.</listitem>
 
       <listitem>The Internet Software Consortium (ISC) uses FreeBSD
@@ -108,4 +108,4 @@
 
     </itemizedlist>
   </foil>
-</foilgroup>
\ No newline at end of file
+</foilgroup>
--- slides-users.diff ends here ---


>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: ceri 
State-Changed-When: Sat Dec 18 15:23:25 GMT 2004 
State-Changed-Why:  
Committed, thanks! 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=74624 
>Unformatted:
