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From: "Joel Dahl" <joel@automatvapen.se>
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Subject: [PATCH] A few minor corrections to the hubs article
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>Number:         72462
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [PATCH] A few minor corrections to the hubs article
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    remko
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Sat Oct 09 11:00:40 GMT 2004
>Closed-Date:    Mon Mar 07 22:31:01 GMT 2005
>Last-Modified:  Mon Mar 07 22:31:01 GMT 2005
>Originator:     Joel Dahl
>Release:        FreeBSD 5.2.1-RELEASE-p9 i386
>Organization:
>Environment:
System: FreeBSD dude.automatvapen.se 5.2.1-RELEASE-p9 FreeBSD 5.2.1-RELEASE-p9 #1: Sat Jul 10 16:52:28 CEST 2004 root@dude.automatvapen.se:/usr/obj/usr/src/sys/WORKSTATION i386


	
>Description:
	Attached patch includes grammatical fixes and a few corrections.

>How-To-Repeat:

>Fix:

--- hub.diff begins here ---
--- article.sgml	Sat Oct  2 18:25:55 2004
+++ new.article.sgml	Sat Oct  9 12:27:48 2004
@@ -162,8 +162,8 @@
           FTP distributions. FTP access must be
           anonymous, and no upload/download ratios
           are allowed (a ridiculous thing anyway).
-          Upload capability is not required (and <emphasis>must</emphasis>
-          never be allowed for the FreeBSD file space).
+          Upload capability is not required (and <emphasis>must never</emphasis>
+          be allowed for the FreeBSD file space).
           Also the FreeBSD archive should be available under
           the path <filename>/pub/FreeBSD</filename>.
         </para>
@@ -666,28 +666,25 @@
          environment variables, like
          <literal>SGML_CATALOG_FILES</literal>.
          Also have a look at your <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>
-         (copy <filename>/etc/defaults/make.conf</filename> if
+         (copy <filename>/usr/share/examples/etc/make.conf</filename> if
          you do not have one), and look at the
          <literal>DOC_LANG</literal> variable.
          Now you are probably ready to run <command>make</command>
-         in you doc directory (<filename>/usr/share/doc</filename>
+         in your doc directory (<filename>/usr/share/doc</filename>
          by default) and build the documentation.
          Again you need to make it accessible for your web server
          and make sure the links point to the right location.
          <important>
            <para>
              The building of the documentation, as well as lots
-             of side issues, is documented itself in:
+             of side issues, is documented itself in the
              <ulink url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/">fdp-primer</ulink>.
              Please read this piece of documentation, especially if you
              have problems building the documentation.
            </para>
          </important>
-         <note>
-           <para>
-           XXX MAYBE THIS CAN BE LINKED FROM WITHIN - NOT USING AN ABSOLUTE URL XXX
-           </para>
-         </note>
+          <!--  XXX MAYBE THIS CAN BE LINKED FROM WITHIN - NOT USING AN
+         ABSOLUTE URL XXX -->
        </para>
      </sect3>
    </sect2>
@@ -845,7 +842,7 @@
         </procedure>
       </sect3>
       <sect3 id="mirror-where-official">
-        <title>I'm an official mirror, what is the right site for me?</title>
+        <title>I am an official mirror, what is the right site for me?</title>
         <para>
           In general the description in <xref linkend="mirror-where-simple">
           still applies. Of course you may want to put some
--- hub.diff ends here ---


>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:

From: Joel Dahl <joel@automatvapen.se>
To: freebsd-gnats-submit@FreeBSD.org
Cc:  
Subject: Re: docs/72462: [PATCH] A few minor corrections to the hubs article
Date: Wed, 23 Feb 2005 11:30:26 +0100

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 Uhh, I've totally forgot about this PR.  Better patch attached.
 
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 Index: article.sgml
 ===================================================================
 RCS file: /home/ncvs/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/hubs/article.sgml,v
 retrieving revision 1.52
 diff -u -r1.52 article.sgml
 --- article.sgml	30 Sep 2004 09:41:45 -0000	1.52
 +++ article.sgml	23 Feb 2005 10:27:35 -0000
 @@ -335,7 +335,7 @@
            Generally there are two ways
            to access a CVS repository remotely: via
            <emphasis>pserver</emphasis> or via <command>ssh</command>
 -          (we don't consider <command>rsh</command>).
 +          (we do not consider <command>rsh</command>).
            For anonymous access, <emphasis>pserver</emphasis> is
            very well suited, but some still offer <command>ssh</command>
            access as well. There is a custom crafted
 @@ -346,7 +346,7 @@
            anonymous user's home-directory.   This may not be possible
            for all sites. If you just offer <emphasis>pserver</emphasis>
            this restriction does not apply, but you may run with
 -          more security risks. You don't need to install any special
 +          more security risks. You do not need to install any special
            software, since &man.cvs.1; comes with
            FreeBSD. You need to enable access via <command>inetd</command>,
            so add an entry into your <filename>/etc/inetd.conf</filename>
 @@ -602,7 +602,7 @@
          <filename role="package">textproc/docproj</filename> port must be
          installed.</para></note>
        <para>
 -        If you don't have a local repository, you can use
 +        If you do not have a local repository, you can use
          <application>CVSup</application> to maintain an <quote>up to date copy</quote>
          of the www pages. A sample supfile can be found in
          <filename>/usr/share/examples/cvsup/www-supfile</filename> and
 @@ -666,18 +666,18 @@
           environment variables, like
           <literal>SGML_CATALOG_FILES</literal>.
           Also have a look at your <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>
 -         (copy <filename>/etc/defaults/make.conf</filename> if
 +         (copy <filename>/usr/share/examples/etc/make.conf</filename> if
           you do not have one), and look at the
           <literal>DOC_LANG</literal> variable.
           Now you are probably ready to run <command>make</command>
 -         in you doc directory (<filename>/usr/share/doc</filename>
 +         in your doc directory (<filename>/usr/share/doc</filename>
           by default) and build the documentation.
           Again you need to make it accessible for your web server
           and make sure the links point to the right location.
           <important>
             <para>
               The building of the documentation, as well as lots
 -             of side issues, is documented itself in:
 +             of side issues, is documented itself in the
               <ulink url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/">fdp-primer</ulink>.
               Please read this piece of documentation, especially if you
               have problems building the documentation.
 @@ -845,7 +845,7 @@
          </procedure>
        </sect3>
        <sect3 id="mirror-where-official">
 -        <title>I'm an official mirror, what is the right site for me?</title>
 +        <title>I am an official mirror, what is the right site for me?</title>
          <para>
            In general the description in <xref linkend="mirror-where-simple">
            still applies. Of course you may want to put some
 @@ -992,7 +992,7 @@
          </para>
          <para>
            It is also important that hub administrators try to keep their mirrors as up-to-date as
 -          possible (again, even more crucial for Tier-1 mirrors). If Mirror1 doesn't update for a
 +          possible (again, even more crucial for Tier-1 mirrors). If Mirror1 does not update for a
            while, lower tier mirrors will begin to mirror old data from Mirror1 and thus begins
            a downward spiral... Keep your mirrors up to date!
          </para>
 
 --=-RTmaB6MsP8YcDDb77LtS--
 
Responsible-Changed-From-To: freebsd-doc->remko 
Responsible-Changed-By: remko 
Responsible-Changed-When: Mon Mar 7 21:19:30 GMT 2005 
Responsible-Changed-Why:  
Grab this PR. 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=72462 
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: remko 
State-Changed-When: Mon Mar 7 22:30:28 GMT 2005 
State-Changed-Why:  
The patch was committed. Thanks! 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=72462 
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