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From: Kevin Kinsey <kdk@daleco.biz>
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Subject: [patch] Grammatical shortcoming in FAQ, 11.2 (x.html)
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>Number:         61270
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [patch] Grammatical shortcoming in FAQ, 11.2 (x.html)
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          change-request
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Mon Jan 12 13:30:12 PST 2004
>Closed-Date:    Mon Jan 12 14:02:47 PST 2004
>Last-Modified:  Mon Jan 12 14:02:47 PST 2004
>Originator:     Kevin Kinsey
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.9-RELEASE i386
>Organization:
DaleCo, S.P.
>Environment:
System: FreeBSD ezekiel.daleco.biz 4.9-RELEASE FreeBSD 4.9-RELEASE #8: Thu Oct 30 14:39:04 CST 2003 kadmin@ezekiel.daleco.biz:/usr/obj/usr/src/sys/GENERIC i386


>Description:

	The FAQ is a fine document, no doubt about that, but
section 11.2 contains the sentence "Your system is running at
a raised secureleve, is not it?" which is not according to standard
English usage and could be improved.  I see no reason to allow a
doc to be a potential "turn-off" for some future user.  True,
it would be their loss, but this is an easy fix, right?

	I'd a tad new to this, is there a CVS revision number
for this document?  The file in question is:
		
		 /usr/share/doc/en/books/faq/x.html

	and the same error appears in the WWW version, or
at least it did yesterday.

	Thanks for considering this change, and keep up the
good work, doc! (sorry, probably an old pun....)

>How-To-Repeat:

	Read section 11.2 of the FreeBSD "FAQ".
>Fix:

I have two patches inline, below.  The first might be
the best, the second is more "faithful to the original".

FIRST VERSION DIFF (/usr/share/doc/en/books/faq/x.html)

--- x.html      Wed Jun  4 21:44:25 2003
+++ x.edit.html Sat Jan 10 18:29:56 2004
@@ -148,8 +148,8 @@
           </div>
 
           <div class="ANSWER">
-            <p><b></b>Your system is running at a raised
-            securelevel, is not it? It is, indeed, impossible to
+            <p><b></b>Your system is probably running at a raised
+            securelevel. It is, indeed, impossible to
             start X at a raised securelevel. To see why, look at
             the <a
             href="http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=init&sektion=8">


SECOND VERSION DIFF (/usr/share/doc/en/books/faq/x.html)

--- x.html      Wed Jun  4 21:44:25 2003
+++ x.edit2.html        Sat Jan 10 18:31:23 2004
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@
 
           <div class="ANSWER">
             <p><b></b>Your system is running at a raised
-            securelevel, is not it? It is, indeed, impossible to
+            securelevel, is it not? It is, indeed, impossible to
             start X at a raised securelevel. To see why, look at
             the <a
             href="http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=init&sektion=8">

>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: ceri 
State-Changed-When: Mon Jan 12 14:02:10 PST 2004 
State-Changed-Why:  
Corrected in r1.604 of doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.sgml. 
Thanks. 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=61270 
>Unformatted:
