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Subject: [PATCH] Various fixes for the IPv6 habdbook chapter
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>Number:         46093
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [PATCH] Various fixes for the IPv6 habdbook chapter
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    ceri
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Sun Dec 08 03:50:01 PST 2002
>Closed-Date:    Sun Dec 08 13:00:54 PST 2002
>Last-Modified:  Sun Dec 08 13:00:54 PST 2002
>Originator:     Christian Brueffer
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.7-STABLE i386
>Organization:
Aachen University of Technology (RWTH)
>Environment:
System: FreeBSD milan.hitnet.rwth-aachen.de 4.7-STABLE FreeBSD 4.7-STABLE #7: Mon Oct 14 10:21:39 CEST 2002 chris@milan.hitnet.rwth-aachen.de:/usr/obj/usr/src/sys/LORIEN i386


	
>Description:
	- natd address translation -> Network Address Translation
	- IPSec -> IPsec
	- mozilla+ipv6 was removed from the ports tree some time ago,
	  so reference mozilla instead
	- Remove a contradiction
	- punctuation fixes
>How-To-Repeat:
	
>Fix:

	



--- advanced-networking.diff begins here ---
--- chapter.sgml.orig	Tue Dec  3 09:20:16 2002
+++ chapter.sgml	Sun Dec  8 12:25:56 2002
@@ -6236,11 +6236,12 @@
 	  anymore since private address spaces
 	  (<hostid role="ipaddr">10.0.0.0/8</hostid>,
 	  <hostid role="ipaddr">192.168.0.0/24</hostid>,
-	  etc.) and natd address translation are being employed.</para>
+	  etc.) and Network Address Translation (<acronym>NAT</acronym>) are
+	  being employed.</para>
       </listitem>
 
       <listitem>
-	<para>Router table entries were getting to large.  This is
+	<para>Router table entries were getting too large.  This is
 	  still a concern today.</para>
       </listitem>
     </itemizedlist>
@@ -6251,7 +6252,7 @@
       <listitem>
 	<para>128 bit address space.  In other words theoretically there are
 	  340,282,366,920,938,463,463,374,607,431,768,211,456 addresses
-	  available.  This means there are approximately.
+	  available.  This means there are approximately
 	  6.67 * 10^27 IPv6 addresses per square meter on our planet.</para>
       </listitem>
 
@@ -6278,7 +6279,7 @@
       </listitem>
 
       <listitem>
-	<para>IPSec (IP Security)</para>
+	<para>IPsec (IP security)</para>
       </listitem>
 
       <listitem>
@@ -6468,7 +6469,7 @@
       <para>This output will differ from machine to machine.  By now you should be
 	able to reach the IPv6 site <ulink url="http://www.kame.net">www.kame.net</ulink>
 	and see the dancing tortoise - that is if you have a IPv6 enabled browser such as
-	<filename role="package">mozilla+ipv6</filename>.</para>
+	<filename role="package">mozilla</filename>.</para>
 
     </sect2>
 
@@ -6482,7 +6483,7 @@
 	</listitem>
 
 	<listitem>
-	  <para>A6records</para>
+	  <para>A6 records</para>
 	</listitem>
       </itemizedlist>
 
@@ -6491,7 +6492,7 @@
 
       <programlisting>MYHOSTNAME           AAAA    MYIPv6ADDR</programlisting>
 
-      <para>To your primary zone DNS file.  In case you don't serve your own
+      <para>To your primary zone DNS file.  In case you do not serve your own
 	<acronym>DNS</acronym> zones ask your <acronym>DNS</acronym> provider.
 	Current versions of <application>bind</application> (version 8.3 and 9)
 	support AAAA records.</para>
--- advanced-networking.diff ends here ---

>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: ceri 
State-Changed-When: Sun Dec 8 13:00:21 PST 2002 
State-Changed-Why:  
Patch committed.  Thanks again. 


Responsible-Changed-From-To: freebsd-doc->ceri 
Responsible-Changed-By: ceri 
Responsible-Changed-When: Sun Dec 8 13:00:21 PST 2002 
Responsible-Changed-Why:  
I made the commit. 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=46093 
>Unformatted:
