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From: Daniel Harris <dannyboy@dannyboy.eyep.net>
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Subject: Spelling and nits, chapter 9 fdp-primer
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>Number:         19267
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       Spelling and nits, chapter 9 fdp-primer
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Wed Jun 14 08:50:01 PDT 2000
>Closed-Date:    Wed Jun 14 18:00:14 PDT 2000
>Last-Modified:  Wed Jun 14 18:01:12 PDT 2000
>Originator:     Daniel Harris
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.0-STABLE i386
>Organization:
>Environment:

	

>Description:

	In no significant order:	
	s/seperate/separate
	Add missing verb to the two-spaces-after-periods section.
	Correct the URL for Elements of Style.
	"Look at the following quote;" becomes "Look at the following:" --
	"quote" is informal for "quotation" -- and that just sounds clunky.

>How-To-Repeat:

	

>Fix:

	

--- chapter.sgml.orig	Wed Jun 14 11:39:17 2000
+++ chapter.sgml	Wed Jun 14 11:34:53 2000
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@
 	  &ldquo;Don't use contractions&rdquo; would be wrong.</para>
 
 	<para>Avoiding contractions makes for a more formal tone, is more
-	  precise, and slightly easier for translators.</para>
+	  precise, and is slightly easier for translators.</para>
       </listitem>
     </varlistentry>
     
@@ -54,11 +54,11 @@
       <term>Use the serial comma</term>
       
       <listitem>
-	<para>In a list of items within a paragraph, seperate each item from
+	<para>In a list of items within a paragraph, separate each item from
 	  the others with a comma.  Seperate the last item from the others with
 	  a comma and the word &ldquo;and&rdquo;.</para>
 
-	<para>For example, look at the following quote;</para>
+	<para>For example, look at the following:</para>
 	
 	<blockquote>
 	  <para>This is a list of one, two and three items.</para>
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@
 	  &ldquo;two&rdquo;, and &ldquo;three&rdquo;, or a list of two items,
 	  &ldquo;one&rdquo; and &ldquo;two and three&rdquo;?</para>
 	
-	<para>It is better to be explicit and include a serial comma;</para>
+	<para>It is better to be explicit and include a serial comma:</para>
 	
 	<blockquote>
 	  <para>This is a list of one, two, and three items.</para>
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@
 	  <application>emacs</application>.</para>
 
 	<para>While it may be argued that a capital letter following
-	  the end of sentence period, this is not the case, especially
+	  a period denotes a new sentence, this is not the case, especially
 	  in name usage.  <quote>Jordan K. Hubbard</quote> is a good
 	  example; it has a capital <literal>H</literal> following a
 	  period and a space, and there certainly isn't a new sentence
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@
   </variablelist>
 
   <para>For more information about writing style, see <ulink
-      url="http://www.columbia.edu/acis/bartleby/strunk/">Elements of
+      url="http://www.bartleby.com/141/index.html">Elements of
       Style</ulink>, by William Strunk.</para>
 
   <sect1>

>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: kevlo 
State-Changed-When: Wed Jun 14 18:00:14 PDT 2000 
State-Changed-Why:  
Committed, thanks. 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=19267 
>Unformatted:
