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From: Tom <trh411@gmail.com>
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Subject: (patch) Handbook Ch 25.7 typos and incidental edits
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>Number:         176451
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       (patch) Handbook Ch 25.7 typos and incidental edits
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    eadler
>State:          closed
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:  
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Tue Feb 26 20:50:00 UTC 2013
>Closed-Date:    Wed Feb 27 21:25:20 UTC 2013
>Last-Modified:  Wed Feb 27 21:30:01 UTC 2013
>Originator:     Tom
>Release:        9.1-RELEASE GENERIC
>Organization:
N/A
>Environment:
>Description:
Suggested corrections to typos and incidental editing of FreeBSD Handbook, Chapter 25, Section 7. Ref: 

/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml (r41051)
>How-To-Repeat:

>Fix:
Patch attached.

Patch attached with submission follows:

--- /usr/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml	2013-02-18 13:25:18.000000000 -0500
+++ chapter.xml	2013-02-26 14:42:20.000000000 -0500
@@ -1813,8 +1813,8 @@
 	up-to-date, refer to <xref linkend="synching"/> for detailed
 	help about synchronizing to a newer version.</para>
 
-      <para>Updating the system from source is a more subtle than
-	it might initially seem to be, and the &os; developers have
+      <para>Updating the system from source is a more subtle process 
+        than it might initially seem to be, and the &os; developers have
 	found it necessary over the years to change the recommended
 	approach fairly dramatically as new kinds of unavoidable
 	dependencies come to light.  The rest of this section
@@ -1858,7 +1858,7 @@
 	</listitem>
 
 	<listitem>
-	  <para>Some configuration changes must be done before the new
+	  <para>Some configuration changes must be made before the new
 	    world is installed, but others might break the old world.
 	    Hence, two different configuration upgrade steps are
 	    generally needed.</para>
@@ -1946,7 +1946,7 @@
 	  <para><command>mergemaster</command></para>
 
 	  <para>Repeated to update the remaining configuration files,
-	    not that the new world is on disk.</para>
+	    now that the new world is on disk.</para>
 	</listitem>
 
 	<listitem>
@@ -2217,7 +2217,7 @@
 	<para><emphasis>Do not</emphasis> save the output in <filename
 	    class="directory">/tmp</filename> as this directory may be
 	  cleared at next reboot.  A better place to save the file is
-	  <filename class="directory">/var/tmp</filename>or in
+	  <filename class="directory">/var/tmp</filename> or in
 	  <username>root</username>'s home directory.</para>
       </sect3>
 
@@ -2234,8 +2234,7 @@
 	<para>To rebuild the world, use &man.make.1;.  This command
 	  reads instructions from the <filename>Makefile</filename>,
 	  which describes how the programs that comprise &os; should
-	  be rebuilt and the order in which they should be
-	  built.</para>
+	  be built and the order in which they should be built.</para>
 
 	<para>The general format of the command is as follows:</para>
 
@@ -2542,7 +2541,7 @@
       <sect3>
 	<title>Manual Update</title>
 
-	<para>To instead perform the update manually, do not just copy
+	<para>To perform the update manually instead, do not just copy
 	  over the files from
 	  <filename class="directory">/usr/src/etc</filename> to
 	  <filename class="directory">/etc</filename> and expect it to
@@ -2580,7 +2579,7 @@
 
 	<para>Next, build a dummy set of directories to install the
 	  new <filename class="directory">/etc</filename> and other
-	  files into.  <filename
+	  files into <filename
 	    class="directory">/var/tmp/root</filename> is a reasonable
 	  choice:</para>
 
@@ -2898,7 +2897,7 @@
 	      <listitem>
 		<para>Turn off profiling by setting
 		  <quote>NO_PROFILE=true</quote> in
-		  <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>).</para>
+		  <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>.</para>
 	      </listitem>
 
 	      <listitem>


>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
Responsible-Changed-From-To: freebsd-doc->eadler 
Responsible-Changed-By: eadler 
Responsible-Changed-When: Wed Feb 27 20:57:09 UTC 2013 
Responsible-Changed-Why:  
I'll take it. 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=176451 
State-Changed-From-To: open->closed 
State-Changed-By: eadler 
State-Changed-When: Wed Feb 27 21:25:19 UTC 2013 
State-Changed-Why:  
Committed. Thanks! 

http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=176451 

From: dfilter@FreeBSD.ORG (dfilter service)
To: bug-followup@FreeBSD.org
Cc:  
Subject: Re: docs/176451: commit references a PR
Date: Wed, 27 Feb 2013 21:24:22 +0000 (UTC)

 Author: eadler
 Date: Wed Feb 27 21:23:57 2013
 New Revision: 41054
 URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/41054
 
 Log:
   Fix a bunch of grammos and typos
   
   PR:		docs/176451
   Submitted by:	Tom <trh411@gmail.com>
   Approved by:	bcr (mentor)
 
 Modified:
   head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml
 
 Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml
 ==============================================================================
 --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml	Wed Feb 27 21:23:54 2013	(r41053)
 +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/cutting-edge/chapter.xml	Wed Feb 27 21:23:57 2013	(r41054)
 @@ -1813,8 +1813,8 @@ Fetching 133 new ports or files... done.
  	up-to-date, refer to <xref linkend="synching"/> for detailed
  	help about synchronizing to a newer version.</para>
  
 -      <para>Updating the system from source is a more subtle than
 -	it might initially seem to be, and the &os; developers have
 +      <para>Updating the system from source is a more subtle process
 +        than it might initially seem to be, and the &os; developers have
  	found it necessary over the years to change the recommended
  	approach fairly dramatically as new kinds of unavoidable
  	dependencies come to light.  The rest of this section
 @@ -1858,7 +1858,7 @@ Fetching 133 new ports or files... done.
  	</listitem>
  
  	<listitem>
 -	  <para>Some configuration changes must be done before the new
 +	  <para>Some configuration changes must be made before the new
  	    world is installed, but others might break the old world.
  	    Hence, two different configuration upgrade steps are
  	    generally needed.</para>
 @@ -1946,7 +1946,7 @@ Fetching 133 new ports or files... done.
  	  <para><command>mergemaster</command></para>
  
  	  <para>Repeated to update the remaining configuration files,
 -	    not that the new world is on disk.</para>
 +	    now that the new world is on disk.</para>
  	</listitem>
  
  	<listitem>
 @@ -2217,7 +2217,7 @@ Script done, &hellip;</screen>
  	<para><emphasis>Do not</emphasis> save the output in <filename
  	    class="directory">/tmp</filename> as this directory may be
  	  cleared at next reboot.  A better place to save the file is
 -	  <filename class="directory">/var/tmp</filename>or in
 +	  <filename class="directory">/var/tmp</filename> or in
  	  <username>root</username>'s home directory.</para>
        </sect3>
  
 @@ -2234,8 +2234,7 @@ Script done, &hellip;</screen>
  	<para>To rebuild the world, use &man.make.1;.  This command
  	  reads instructions from the <filename>Makefile</filename>,
  	  which describes how the programs that comprise &os; should
 -	  be rebuilt and the order in which they should be
 -	  built.</para>
 +	  be built and the order in which they should be built.</para>
  
  	<para>The general format of the command is as follows:</para>
  
 @@ -2542,7 +2541,7 @@ Script done, &hellip;</screen>
        <sect3>
  	<title>Manual Update</title>
  
 -	<para>To instead perform the update manually, do not just copy
 +	<para>To perform the update manually instead, do not just copy
  	  over the files from
  	  <filename class="directory">/usr/src/etc</filename> to
  	  <filename class="directory">/etc</filename> and expect it to
 @@ -2580,7 +2579,7 @@ Script done, &hellip;</screen>
  
  	<para>Next, build a dummy set of directories to install the
  	  new <filename class="directory">/etc</filename> and other
 -	  files into.  <filename
 +	  files into <filename
  	    class="directory">/var/tmp/root</filename> is a reasonable
  	  choice:</para>
  
 @@ -2898,7 +2897,7 @@ Building everything..
  	      <listitem>
  		<para>Turn off profiling by setting
  		  <quote>NO_PROFILE=true</quote> in
 -		  <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>).</para>
 +		  <filename>/etc/make.conf</filename>.</para>
  	      </listitem>
  
  	      <listitem>
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