Subj : What did the boy do?
To   : Anton Shepelev
From : Alexander Koryagin
Date : Mon Nov 18 2019 08:43:18

Hi, Anton Shepelev!
I read your message from 17.11.2019 13:59

 AK>>>> I believe this change has been caused by the fact that very many
 AK>>>> people live in stress, and food is a very effective
 AK>>>> antidepressant.

 AS>>> The ubiquotous "the fact that" is exceedingly cumbersome and wont
 AS>>> to appear whenever the author has given insufficient thought to
 AS>>> arranging the sentence. I avoid it at all costs, together with
 AS>>> the fused participle, e.g. "due to many people's living in
 AS>>> constant stress."

 AK>> Be simpler! If you can say an idea in a simple way it is not
 AK>> necessary blame yourself. Greatness is in simplicity!

 AS> But simplicity is one of the hardest things to attain. It is easy
 AS> to complicate matters, but skull-cracking and brain-cudgelling hard
 AS> to simplify them! What, for example, are your proposals as to the
 AS> simplification of your cumbersome sentnece? Or do you want to
 AS> improve mine?

-sentence

 AS> How about this
 AS> "I ascribe this to the unwholesome habit of abusing food as
 AS> an antidepressant."

I believe that your way of speaking is pretentious or formal. I don't think 
people around you will be happy if you constantly use words as if taken from 
medicine textbooks. "I ascribe this"! My foot! ;-)

PS: IMHO ;)

Bye, Anton!
Alexander Koryagin
english_tutor 2019

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