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        MarkusWandel wrote 30 min ago:
        So LLMs can't do that?    Every LLM-written historical or
        pseoudo-historical (i.e. made up) thing that comes up in my Facebook
        feed does start with a "hook" like that.  Doesn't make them great
        articles but obviously you can prompt them to do it.
       
        smeej wrote 54 min ago:
        I found it really ironic that the author started with something
        attention-grabbing about a topic completely unrelated to his point, but
        then made a series of such mundane statements to begin his own writing
        that I didn't care enough to go past his first screen. He didn't make
        me care about why I should make people care.
       
        wosined wrote 1 hour 19 min ago:
        Sorry, but I have to disagree. I don't like books that read like
        adverts.
       
        raincole wrote 2 hours 30 min ago:
        Is this a good advice? Yes.
        
        And what would happen if everyone followed it? Clickbait titles like
        "the third one will surprise you" and TikTok.
       
        d--b wrote 4 hours 52 min ago:
        The author is right, I care a lot more about the Venice thing than
        reading the rest of the article.
       
        orleyhuxwell wrote 4 hours 52 min ago:
        For the last 30 years I've decided that the best stuff (most engaging
        books, stories, experiences in life) require investment. It gets worse
        (you go through some pain while exercising) before it gets better. 
        That's essentially a definition of a good life to me - finding the
        things worth sacrificing resources and getting the payoff.
        
        So 'first make me care' to me is a manifest of Gen Z - tiktok -
        brainrot approach.
        From my perspective you miss most of the really good stuff by
        cultivating this approach.
        I.e. my favorite books - Tai Pan, Noble House; tv series - Better Call
        Saul! - require you to go through so much of initial boredom.
        It's also the same discussion as 'learn to code vs only do AI Slop' or
        'learn math and algos vs only import functions from libs and never
        check what's inside'.
        
        *Exceptions apply, ofc. There are things that hook you and
        progressively ad depth, but it's really rare. I.e. Arcane tv show is
        both easy to access and quite deep.
        
        Edit:
        ...so I can imagine math teacher that first tell you what are some
        amazing uses of derivatives and integrals - PIDs, SGD, better
        estimation, wave functions, generalized description of problems,
        accessing interesting physics etc. And after that they make you grind.
        I think it would be quite great. But it is so rare, that you have to
        make a leap of faith and assume most of the good stuff is boring
        initially.
       
        aucisson_masque wrote 5 hours 14 min ago:
        That’s basically what tv shows do every time. The pilot is
        great/awesome then the 10 episodes are boring and the very last one get
        exciting enough for you to wait the second season.
        
        Best example: the walking dead season tv shows.
       
        miki123211 wrote 5 hours 27 min ago:
        What I find extremely off-putting and overused is the pattern of making
        you care about an article by saying something about the person being
        interviewed, usually related to the interview itself. Think "he was a
        balding man[...] drinking his matcha latte[...]" It's always something
        which has zero bearing on the situation in question.
        
        Whenever I see this, I immediately turn to cmd-a + cmd-c + `pbpaste |
        llm 'summarize this'`
       
        teiferer wrote 6 hours 41 min ago:
        > We could easily have a 2026 LLM deliver high-quality editing advice
        to fix this up extensively, but it would still be mediocre.
        
        This seems to suggest that a human needs to be in the creative loop,
        but that could be short sighted. LLM training has humans in the loop
        which optimize for not being bored. That's a reason for LLM texts
        typically being recognizeable because at the current stage they are a
        little too simplistically flashy. But give it a few iterations and the
        machine will excel humans at catching their attention, i.e., making
        them care.
        
        As others wrote: Tiktok is already excellent at that. While the content
        in there still has humans in the loop, the choice what to show to whom
        and when is already entirely mechanical.
       
        DeathArrow wrote 7 hours 5 min ago:
        This is even more true for public speaking. Try to hook people from the
        start.
       
        coolThingsFirst wrote 9 hours 6 min ago:
        What are those sun symbols after paragraph ends.
        
        Always found them interesting.
       
        njarboe wrote 9 hours 28 min ago:
        “Venice built a maritime empire from a city that couldn’t feed
        itself; so who fed it—and why didn’t its enemies simply starve it
        out?”
        
        I love ancient history and would read a good book about the Venetian
        empire, but the sentence answers the final question. Venice was a
        maritime empire (it's capital on an island), that's why its enemies
        could not starve it out. All in on finding out who fed it.
       
        shalmanese wrote 10 hours 9 min ago:
        There is content you write for acquisition and content you write for
        retention and my #1 tip for writers who want to engineer growing an
        audience is be clear before you sit down to write a piece which it’s
        going to be.
        
        Content for acquisition, the reader’s relationship is to the topic,
        they have to be convinced the topic is relevant to their life goals but
        it’s valuable despite who the topic.
        
        Content for retention, the readers relationship is to you as the writer
        and the topic is merely there as a MacGuffin to help illuminate some
        aspect of you that is unique.
        
        Business Insider had this down to a science over a decade ago. They
        started a series called “So Expensive”, detailing why various
        things were expensive, the first 4 videos in the series were: Caviar,
        Saffron, Rolexes and Horseshoe Crab Blood. Statistically, some tens of
        millions of people have organically had the thought of why the first 3
        were expensive but zero people have even wondered why horseshoe crab
        blood was expensive. The 4th video was a way to test, of all the people
        who were willing to click on the first three, how many were willing to
        follow along to the 4th because of a trust in BI? The next 4 in the
        series was Vanilla, Silk, Louboutins & Scorpion Venom.
        
        Creating all content for acquisition is both too exhausting and also
        sub optimal for the reader because they want deeper stuff to follow as
        well. I suggest up to 1 in 3 acquisition articles if you can manage
        when starting out but then ramping down to no more than 1 in 10 fairly
        quickly or you burn out.
       
          kqr wrote 1 hour 54 min ago:
          This mirrors reflections I've had recently as well. I have been, for
          the most part, focusing on what you would call "content for
          acquisition", i.e. easily relatable, somewhat shallow, extensively
          researched articles that show off what I can write at my best.
          
          But in trying to aim for a regular cadence in the past year, I've
          realised I cannot maintain that level across the board. So I've
          started to write things that aren't as "good", in my flawed
          subjective judgment. Yet surprisingly often those are the things I
          get positive emails about, from readers who are glad I took the time
          to put things into words.
          
          I am trying to come to terms with the idea that some of my more
          enthusiastic readers might really be happy to read even things that
          aren't up to what I consider to be my standards. But it's deeply
          uncomfortable. Triggers my impostor syndrome like little else.
       
            shalmanese wrote 17 min ago:
            Another common mistake I see "thoughtfluencer" bloggers make is
            they think they need a brand new idea per post. This not only isn't
            sustainable, it's bad for the audience.
            
            Instead, I think a successful blog is really about finding your, at
            most, 3 - 5 big ideas and instead showing the audience how they
            apply in many different context. For example, Matt Levine returns
            to a few commmon catchphrases across years of his writing: "People
            are worried about bond market liquidity", “Everything Is
            Securities Fraud” etc. that crop up in odd and wonderful ways in
            totally new contexts across years of writing. Forming a
            relationship with his writing is deepening your appreciation of
            these concepts.
       
        ziofill wrote 12 hours 11 min ago:
        This reminds me of what my PhD supervisor told me as he was trashing my
        first draft of my first paper: “up until this point in your life
        you’ve been trained to convince someone who knows more than you that
        you know something by writing impressive equations and complex
        concepts. Now you are the expert and if you do that nobody will read
        your papers. And if someone stops after a few sentences you’ll lose
        citations too.”
       
          muzani wrote 10 hours 4 min ago:
          Similar experience with my bachelor's thesis after I presented it.
          
          Supervisor: "Great job with this."
          
          Me: "The assessor didn't seem too impressed."
          
          Supervisor: "You should have sold it better."
          
          That was the point where I realized that all the technical stuff
          doesn't really matter if nobody realizes how hard it was or why they
          should care.
       
          bawis wrote 10 hours 23 min ago:
          What was your PhD thesis about ?
       
            ziofill wrote 2 hours 29 min ago:
            I studied the entanglement formed during a quantum nonlinear
            process
       
        gizajob wrote 12 hours 37 min ago:
        I felt like the movie Marty Supreme completely failed to make me care
        about the main character until the final act where the filmmakers had
        to pull out all the big easy stops to force me to care about him. A
        third of the way in to the movie I was wondering if it was going to be
        explained at any point why I should be interested in this guy or care
        about his difficult and fairly unremarkable personality. A lot of the
        time it seems as if creatives assume that if you’re
        watching/reading/engaging with their movie/book/artwork then you
        already care enough to care.
       
        nathan_compton wrote 12 hours 39 min ago:
        A good writer should be able to write a catchy hook.
        
        A wise person should be able to read text that is flavored like
        cardboard. In general, one thing I dislike about this moment, is the
        incredible emphasis we place on the first five seconds of everything
        because everyone is thinking about all the other things we could be
        doing.
        
        But many things are great because of how they feel 20 years later. The
        first five seconds of playing a musical instrument is horrible, but 20
        years later and it is sublime. Emacs, Vim, are both notoriously
        forbidding, and yet, they are wonderful tools. Some things can be
        massaged to meet both criteria (I can imagine some emacs configuration
        that made it less painful and surfaced its true power in the first five
        seconds maybe), but other things are hard by nature and derive their
        value from how we have to adapt to them instead of how well they are
        adapted to us. I feel like the AI era is going to just accelerate this
        trend where everything we interact with is a slick surface and many
        people will never experience depth.
        
        Read boring shit.
       
        mmooss wrote 13 hours 28 min ago:
        Expanding Gwern's well made point, just a little, is that writing of
        any length needs a thesis statement in the first paragraph or so.
        
        Thesis statements are not a new techniques, and these days they are
        needed much more because there is so much to read. Many articles don't
        state their thesis at all or not for a long time.
        
        I don't have time to read that far to find out if it's worthwhile to
        me. Unless you are Satoshi Nakamoto, I'm not going to read far to find
        out.
       
        kazinator wrote 14 hours 31 min ago:
        Video edition:
        
        1. First, make me care.
        
        2. Then provide an indication (e.g. in the video description) giving
        the time in the video where the question starts to be answered.
        
        If you make me somewhat care, but I have to binary search through your
        video to skip the rambling, I'm likely to back button out.
       
          NegativeK wrote 13 hours 40 min ago:
          First, make me care and tell me the answer. In 30 seconds.
          
          Then expand on it in increasingly advanced levels of detail.
          
          If your knowledge is high, I won't care about the video production.
          If you're not getting to the point quickly, you're manipulating the
          audience into getting views; education and sharing knowledge isn't
          the main driver of your video.
          
          But what I want is idealistic.
       
        davidw wrote 14 hours 33 min ago:
        The actual story of how cod from Norway came to be a thing in the
        Serenissima Repubblica di Venezia is pretty interesting:
        
 (HTM)  [1]: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pietro_Querini
       
        deadbabe wrote 14 hours 33 min ago:
        I hate this. Basically it’s saying use constant clickbait to keep
        your reader reading.
        
        Increasingly, readers don’t have time for this shit. Be direct, and
        if the reader doesn’t care, they were never meant to be your reader
        anyway. Someone will care, write for them.
       
        imoreno wrote 14 hours 36 min ago:
        There's a spectrum of writing, corresponding to supply/demand or
        push/pull. The article is giving advice for oversupplied writing, where
        the audience doesn't really want to hear you, and you're trying to
        badger it into reading it anyway - typically, for some sort of personal
        gain (getting an interview, making a sale, promoting a political
        cause). Yes, attention hacking is important in this case.
        
        There is also a writing where people are looking for the information,
        and they are showing up at your door because they already care.
        Presumably you wrote, because you saw the open question, and want to
        try answering it. History books, encyclopedias, classic literature by
        dead people, falls under this. Ironically, so does the example of
        Venice - you would read about Venice if you were already curious; there
        is little profit in "making someone care" about Venice otherwise. An
        attention grabby style would be forced and counterproductive in this.
       
        oytis wrote 15 hours 3 min ago:
        So how did Venice maintain its dominance?
       
        atmosx wrote 15 hours 10 min ago:
        Adrian Wooldridge (the Economist) in "Aristocracy of Talent: How
        Meritocracy Made the Modern World" argues, rather successfully IMO,
        that what made Venice the maritime super-power was meritocracy. Indeed,
        he argues, that the fall of the Venitian empire came swiftly when the
        Doge was forced to place only Venitians (birthright) to top positions,
        instead of the most "capable". Hence the available talent pool shrunk.
        
        The book makes for a fine read IMO: [1] ps. this book came out as a
        response to Michael Sandell's "The Tyranny of Merit: What's Become of
        the Common Good?" which was a best seller at the time.
        
 (HTM)  [1]: https://www.amazon.com/Aristocracy-Talent-Meritocracy-Modern-W...
       
        dvrp wrote 15 hours 12 min ago:
        Care is the most important trait of people who make great things; it's
        not money or time. Is not even skill.
        
        I was interviewing a candidate yesterday and I noticed that a project
        inside their personal website was not working. I told him my opinion on
        care and he said that he hasn't had the time to deploy it, since he's
        been working on it for 2 weeks already and it was working on his local
        machine.
        
        A few hours after the interview, the project was online.
        
        The bitter pill of realizing the importance of care is that this
        applies not just to literary works, like Gwern's case, but it also
        applies to any creative endeavor: writing, music, drawing, and yes,
        software engineering.
        
        That CLI tool without a tutorial. That product with a confusing sign-up
        flow. The purchase without a confirmation dialog such that I don't feel
        I was just scammed.
        
        It's all the same. Lack of care.
        
        I've also noticed that when caring is there, skills follow.
       
        PeterWhittaker wrote 15 hours 28 min ago:
        Perhaps I am too much of a curmudgeon, but the example first sentence
        made me not care at all - not about Venice, but about the writer's
        approach, which seems to want to conjure breathless mystery about
        something I could easily look up on Wikipedia (or read in tl;dr
        comments in this thread).
        
        It ISN'T Venice you need to make me care about, it's YOU! Why should I
        spend any of my time on you?
        
        A good first sentence should make me care about your perspective, at
        least for non-fiction about subjects well-studied.
        
        Fiction, obvs, differs. Scalzi's Old Man's War had such a great first
        sentence I devoured the series.
       
        danderedandolo wrote 16 hours 3 min ago:
        Know your audience is right, and Gwern misses the most interesting
        thing about Venice- that it was a merchantile Republic with reasonable
        independance from the Catholic Church. Lots of the political ideas
        which influenced British and American democracy came from the Italian
        city states. Ruskin's Stones of Venice and Bowsma's "Venice and the
        defense of republican liberty" capture this well, as do parts of
        Quentin Skinner's "The Foundations of Modern Political Thought."
       
        firasd wrote 16 hours 17 min ago:
        I'm beginning to think that origin stories are an underrated way to
        find these angles. Like why exactly did you start thinking about this
        topic. I guess the recipe bloggers were on to this with their long
        rambles about where they first tried this dish (albeit it may have been
        for SEO too...)
       
        otikik wrote 16 hours 17 min ago:
        Careful with this advice. If you max it out you end up with
        
        "You won't believe the weird trick that the city of Venice did to feed
        itself"
       
          julianeon wrote 9 hours 2 min ago:
          This article is just a slightly upscale version of the million
          "YouTube hooks" videos you can find on, well, you know. Down to the
          "create a gap" advice.
          
          Once upon a time "one weird trick" was good advice too, before it got
          ran into the ground.
       
        mvkel wrote 16 hours 30 min ago:
        This seems like a cheap trick to hook someone into a blog post
        (ironically, Gwern seems to disregard this almost universally).
        
        If I were reading a book and each chapter started with such a "hook,"
        it'd start to feel like a LinkedIn post.
        
        Chapter 1: I didn't know what it felt like to be alive until I was
        dead...
        
        Chapter 2: Death was nothing compared to what came next: judgment.
        
        Chapter 3: I thought I knew what judgment was until...
       
        fukukitaru wrote 16 hours 34 min ago:
        Chuunibyou-tier slop.
       
        seydor wrote 16 hours 40 min ago:
        10 reasons why clickbait is good for you:
        
        1)
       
        blauditore wrote 16 hours 44 min ago:
        I disagree with the stated examples and literally quit reading there.
       
        yetihehe wrote 16 hours 46 min ago:
        And thus "question-bait" was born.
       
        Jap2-0 wrote 16 hours 51 min ago:
        Okay, because no one seems to be answering the Venice question:
        
        - They had a strong navy (and shipbuilding capacity), making a blockade
        difficult
        
        - They traded with many nations, so no one group could cut off their
        food supply
        
        - Fish
        
        - They had a near monopoly on the trade of salt and spices, the former
        of which was important to everyone and the latter of which was
        important to aristocrats
        
        (note: I read a few sources but this is not thorough research)
       
          Animats wrote 14 hours 2 min ago:
          Venice is the extreme "tail wagging the dog" situation. Venice is
          dinky. It's not much bigger than San Francisco.  Yet it was a major
          European power for centuries.
       
            BurningFrog wrote 10 hours 5 min ago:
            Venice was small by land mass, but controlled the Eastern
            Mediterranean, and therefore the Black Sea endpoint of the Silk
            Road, which was immensely profitable.
            
            Consequently, Vasco da Gama rounding Africa in 1498 doomed Venice
            as a great power.
            
            (All from memory, 100% factuality not guaranteed)
       
          eulgro wrote 14 hours 15 min ago:
          Thanks. Ironically, the article started off great with that but
          clearly it wasn't going to answer the question, so I only read the
          first paragraph.
       
        tpoacher wrote 16 hours 53 min ago:
        Counterpoint.
        
        People our so tired of sensational intros and baiting questions which
        bury the actual lede up to the point where you discover it requires an
        annual subscription to find out the actual answer, that now it's
        actually counterproductive to start with an interesting "question".
        
        It's facts first or gtfo. Prove to me that I'm not going to waste my
        time until you deliver what you promised, by delivering enough of that
        relevant background up front, otherwise I don't have time for your
        shenanigans.
       
          marginalia_nu wrote 16 hours 38 min ago:
          Starting with the point (a.k.a. the inverted pyramid) is actually a
          pretty good way of finding readers that care[1].  I fairly often
          often put the conclusion in the title, and must have been on the HN
          front page over 20 times by now.
          
          This is obviously not the only way to construct an article (nor the
          only one I employ), but it is surprisingly reliable, and will attract
          and retain the readers who are actually interested in what you have
          to say, while letting those that aren't interested find something
          else.
          
 (HTM)    [1]: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Inverted_pyramid_(journalism)
       
            wtetzner wrote 10 hours 59 min ago:
            > Starting with the point (a.k.a. the inverted pyramid) is actually
            a pretty good way of finding readers that care[1].
            
            I think this is an important distinction. I would argue that it's
            better to make the point clear to find readers that care, than to
            try to make all readers care.
       
        underdeserver wrote 17 hours 1 min ago:
        Probably should be marked (2025).
       
          zahlman wrote 16 hours 37 min ago:
          It literally says 2026 in the URL. Perhaps it was written before the
          new year and published now, but that doesn't seem particularly
          relevant to the advice given anyway.
       
        tolerance wrote 17 hours 4 min ago:
        You know I’ve never read an article by Gwern that made me feel like
        he was sensitive to this idea, one that in my head essentially breaks
        down to the use of narrative and the leverage of “stakes” that
        inform the reader of kinds of conflict that make a narrative special.
        
        I’m reminded of a remark made by David Foster Wallace (on KCRW? Or
        oft-repeated elsewhere) about how he had to come to terms with the
        purpose of writing not being to show off how smart you are to the
        reader. Instead your writing has to evince some kind of innate
        investment to the reader that piques their genuine interests and
        intrigue.
        
        A lot of writers are tainted by the expectations set in grade school.
        Write for a grade and good writing is what yields a good grade
        according to the standards set by the subject which often is not
        ‘Composition’ but more like ‘Prove to me that you remember
        everything we mentioned in class about the French Revolution’.
        
        I’ve never felt drawn into an article by Gwern at least not in the
        way that I have been by some writing by Maciej Cegłowski, for example.
        Reading Gwern I am both overwhelmed by the adornments to the text
        (hyperlinks, pop-ups, margin notes; other hypertext doodads and
        portals) and underwhelmed by the substance of the text itself. I
        don’t consider Paul Graham a literary griot either. But I find that
        his own prose is bolstered by a kind of clarity and asceticism that is
        informative and not entirely void of good style and form.
        
        Lawrence McEnery of the University of the Chicago contributed a lot of
        good thinking to this kind of stuff though.
        
        This wasn’t meant to be a criticism of the author of this post’s
        own work. But here that’s how it’s left. I haven’t come across
        any writing of his that’s as intriguing as "Empires Without Farms:
        The Case of Venice” seems. If anyone has any recommendations, do
        share.
       
          alexdobrenko wrote 1 hour 9 min ago:
          > Maciej Cegłowski
          
          Where do you recommend one starts with his writing?
          
          And who else do you love to read?
       
          ashdksnndck wrote 7 hours 16 min ago:
          My feeling about Gwern is that I won the jackpot if he happens to
          have written on a subject I want to know more about. His writing is a
          wealth of information. It not always compelling if I’m not already
          interested.
       
          keiferski wrote 7 hours 28 min ago:
          Thanks for writing this, I’ve had similar feelings about a variety
          of writers over the years.
          
          My conclusion was just that some people write to signal their
          intelligence to other people by including as many references and
          complex ideas as possible, with basically zero attention paid to the
          form of the writing itself. It is just a form of information
          transfer, not a particular interest in the writing art form.
          
          And so if you’re not interested in the topics they’re talking
          about, and you don’t care about evaluating the writer’s
          intelligence, the whole thing just seems rambling and pompous.
          
          I wish these writers would study essays that are praised for their
          clarity and brevity. Or haiku, which is defined by its brevity. Truly
          great writers IMO do not write 10 sentences when one will do.
       
          gizajob wrote 12 hours 33 min ago:
          It’s a good quote from DFW but like all great useful pithy
          quotations it’s usually negated somehow by the activities of the
          utterer elsewhere. It seemed almost granted that one of the
          metaconcepts within Infinite Jest was that his ability to churn out
          reams of that stuff was far in excess of your ability to even read
          through it.
       
            ofalkaed wrote 11 hours 42 min ago:
            Assuming the poster's recollection of the quote is correct, there
            is nothing to be negated, coming to terms with something does not
            mean you overcame it, No clue how close that is to the actual quote
            but it sounds like Wallace's phrasing.
       
              tolerance wrote 10 hours 58 min ago:
              In conversation with Michael Silverblatt in 1996 (this is from a
              machine generated transcript, I’ll do my best to clean up after
              it’s attempts to parse DFW’s stammering):
              
              > ...I guess when I was in my twenties, like deep down underneath
              all the bullshit, what I really believed was that the point of
              fiction was to show that the writer was really smart. And that
              sounds terrible to say. But I think looking back, that's what was
              going on. And uh I don't think I really understood what
              loneliness was when when I was a young man and and now I've got a
              much less clear idea of what the point of art is, but I think
              it's got something to do with loneliness, and something to do
              with setting up a conversation between human beings. And I know
              that when I started this book I wanted to I—I had very—I had
              very vague and not very ambitious ambitions. And one was I wanted
              to do something really sad. I'd done comedy before. I wanted to
              do something really sad. And I wanted to do something about what
              was sad about America. And um I—there's a—there's a fair
              amount of of weird and hard technical stuff going on in this
              book, but I mean one reason why I'm willing to go around and talk
              to people about it and that I'm sorta proud of it in a way I
              haven't been about earlier stuff is that I feel like
              I—Whatever's hard in the book is in service of something that
              at least for me is good and important. And it's embarrassing to
              talk about because I think it sounds kind of cheesy. Um I—I—I
              sort of think like all the way down kind of to my butthole I was
              a different person coming up with this book than I was about my
              earlier stuff. And I'm not saying my earlier stuff was all crap,
              you know, but it's just it seems like I think when you're very
              young and until you've sort of uh you know, faced various
              darknesses, um it's very difficult to understand how—how You're
              welcome to cut all this out if this just sounds like, you know, a
              craft product or something.
              
              The part about writing having to "evince some kind of innate
              investment to the reader that piques their genuine interests and
              intrigue” is my own interpretation of what I took from
              interviews between Wallace and Silverblatt on KCRW between 1996
              and 2006. Skimming through the entire transcript I have
              (there’s a 2+ hour compilation of all the interviews on
              Youtube) this is probably a mixture of remarks made in 1996
              (Infinite Jest) [1] and 1997 (A Supposedly Fun Thing I’ll Never
              Do Again) [2]. I vaguely remember a remark of his along the lines
              of the duty of a writer to ‘always let the reader know what the
              stakes are’. Or something like that.
              
              Another quote from the 1996 interview in attempt to support my
              previous statements:
              
              > [Fiction’s] got a very weird and complicated job because part
              of its job is to—is to—teach; Teach the reader, communicate
              with the reader, establish some sort of relationship with the
              reader where the reader is willing on a neurological level to
              expend effort; to look hard enough at the jellyfish to see that
              it's pretty. And—and that stuff's in that kind of effort is
              very hard to talk about and it's real scary because you can't be
              sure whether you've done it or not. And it's what makes you sort
              of clutch your heart when somebody says, I really like this...
              
              My favorite one may be from the conversation they had in 2000:
              
              > I—I think—I—I—I think somewhere in the late eighties or
              somewhere some at some point when that sort of minimalist fiction
              began to pass from vogue It wasn't that the class questions
              changed, it was that I think the class questions disappeared.
              And—and questions that were issues that were fundamentally
              about—about class and inclusion became more for people like
              maybe my age a little younger, questions of—of corporation, um
              corporations and consumers and consuming models versus kind of
              alternative uh homemade quote unquote non—non—corporate
              transactions. I don't know if this makes any sort of sense. Where
              I—I know for me a certain kind of smoothness, um, that you
              could th—that you can identify with resolution, easily
              identified kind of black and white um heroes and villains, um
              standard standardly satisfying endings involving the
              gratification of romance or, you know, epistemological problems.
              I associate with corporate entertainment whose—whose agenda is
              fundamentally financial, whose—some—some of and—some of
              it’s—some of it's quite good. Um but—but its
              fundamental—its fundamental orientation is um there —there's
              no—there's no warmth in it toward the reader or no attempt to
              involve the reader or the audience in a kind of relationship or
              interaction. It's a—it's a—it's a transaction of a certain
              kind of gratification in exchange for in exchange for money. [3]
              [1] < [1] > [2] < [1] > [3] < [1] >
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://www.kcrw.com/shows/bookworm/stories/david-foster...
 (HTM)        [2]: https://www.kcrw.com/shows/bookworm/stories/david-foster...
 (HTM)        [3]: https://www.kcrw.com/shows/bookworm/stories/david-foster...
       
          trinsic2 wrote 12 hours 36 min ago:
          Besides the quote, which I think is a good practice, having never
          read his stuff, he seems like he publishes his notes directly from
          his note taking app.
          
          That's fine if you want to publish ideas in short form, but I don't
          think any of that is considered a piece of work that has been fully
          fleshed out. I don't really see any stuff that's designed to actually
          be a publication.
       
          mcmoor wrote 13 hours 3 min ago:
          I feel the same. I found that blog from SSC/ACX and I still much
          prefer SSC/ACX despite gwern discussing topics that are much much
          more relevant to my interests (sw dev, Haskell, anime). I can't
          formulate why but your analysis sounds close enough.
       
            flexagoon wrote 11 hours 29 min ago:
            ACX is honestly an incredible writer. I think it's a very high bar
            to clear.
       
              orthoxerox wrote 5 hours 58 min ago:
              Yes, Scott has a natural talent for writing (there's an article
              where he explicitly says he isn't proud of his prose because it
              just comes naturally to him, but is immensely proud of getting a
              B in Calculus back in pre-med, or something along these lines).
       
          mmooss wrote 13 hours 37 min ago:
          Gwern's point stands on its own merits regardless of what you think
          of the rest of their blog. And the evidence is overwhelmingly the
          other way: Lots of people, and especially lots on HN, are very
          engaged with Gwern's writing, so Gwern seems to be onto something
          about how to engage readers. What do you think that is?
          
          That would be valuable analysis. Or provide constructive feedback.
          The complaints aren't constructive and don't inform us about the OP.
          To me they seem pointless and in the wrong spirit, especially when
          someone is in the room, within earshot.
          
          Edit: removed an error in what I said originally, sorry.
       
            weitendorf wrote 10 hours 18 min ago:
            I think I know the answer, but people don’t want to hear it.
            Gwern has a kind of formula/structure really effectively markets
            his blog to the HN audience, which is Not Bad Actually, just
            effective messaging + giving people what they want.
            
            You can’t really separate the content from its medium, its
            contex, and its audience if you’re thinking about “why is this
            successful” (why does the medium express the content n a
            particular content that works for some particular audience). What
            the blog post is really about is not “writing” or creating good
            content per-se, but how to structure content for a
            blog-like/feed-based medium where you’re competing for clicks,
            views, attention, participation in external narratives, and
            relevancy/memorability with an audience mostly looking to be
            entertained or scratch some curiosity itch.
            
            Gwern has a good formula for that which matched the HN context and
            audience:
            
            1. Pique interest and grab attention. Give me a reason to click.
            
            2. Let the reader in on the secret, you and me vs all these other
            idiots. Validate me.
            
            3. Back it all up with sources/references and a post that
            articulates something the reader already was aware of but
            fundamentally agreed with. Teach me something but make me feel like
            “Finally someone who gets it” rather than challenged or
            threatened.
            
            4. Do the work to actually deliver on the hook. Satisfy my
            curiosity and give me a reason to come back and share it.
            
            None of this is even necessarily manipulative, it’s just the form
            that successfully competes in a click-driven market for attention
            and information (the context). Nobody has to click or read through
            or share or comment on the thing. Most likely very few will click
            through to the sources, but they might peep them or be interested
            to know that they exist. It’s very effective progressive
            disclosure.
            
            The thing is, this audience REALLY does not want to believe that
            they can be marketed to or that their decision making is many ways
            pretty damn emotional/predictable. Gwern does an excellent job
            validating that for them AND successfully marketing to them anyway.
            I think that’s the part that’s missing from this post.
            
            The context is completely non-captive, the audience wants to feel
            smart, and believes that they are “too smart to be marketed
            to”. Here they are scrolling through an attention market looking
            for interesting information that they need to be convinced to
            click, read through, share, and engage with. Why was the link
            shared and content created to being with, and how did it structure
            itself to fit its content/audience, and why does a particular
            structure/messaging work while others don't?
            
            The word for all of that is Marketing. It's just a Good Thing when
            done right.
       
              mvc wrote 1 hour 42 min ago:
              > each me something but make me feel like “Finally someone who
              gets it” rather than challenged or threatened.
              
              Ironically, AI has been making me feel like this lately. But it
              taught me all of this (i.e. your exact point about the
              psycological levers employed by people/organizations who
              understand why stuff goes viral).
              
              So is that real or am I just being successfully marketed to, now
              by AI.
       
                weitendorf wrote 1 hour 14 min ago:
                I guess my meta-point is that "marketing" shouldn't be such a
                dirty word, because done well enough, it's effective
                communication that gives people what they want/helps them AND
                makes them feel good. My own comment basically does the same
                thing I said he did, lol.
                
                The point of calling it marketing is that this blog post is
                explaining hooks, basic content marketing (ie be entertaining
                or interesting), progressive disclosure, and understanding your
                target audience: standard marketing concepts. You can find a
                lot of info if you research them by those terms.
                
                Gwern's audience, in an ironic twist of fate, think that being
                marketed to = being tricked or manipulated by an evil person,
                so here he is explaining basic content marketing concepts to
                the people his blog is marketed towards, who hate marketing and
                believe themselves immune to it.
                
                AI does the same thing to you because 1. most of the web is
                marketing 2. why shouldn't it be nice to you AND help you? 3.
                you keep coming back for more, right? And is that necessarily a
                bad thing?
                
                I highly recommend a deep dive into signalling theory if you're
                interested in learning more, it's completely changed how I
                think about communication and behavior, even my own.
       
                  mvc wrote 37 min ago:
                  Sure, when it's fronting a great product, I have no issue
                  with marketing. But it can be abused, which makes people
                  suspicious (but not invulnerable as we know).
                  
                  Anyway, I am currently in "lean in and find out" mode with AI
                  :-)
                  
                  Not quite at Gas Town yet but I've dropped a lot of baggage
                  and willing to take a hike to try and find it.
       
              mmooss wrote 9 hours 34 min ago:
              I think that's a very interesting, thoughtful response.
              
              > You can’t really separate the content from its medium, its
              contex, and its audience
              
              Yes, I completely agree.
              
              > the audience wants to feel smart, and believes that they are
              “too smart to be marketed to”. Here they are scrolling
              through an attention market looking for interesting information
              that they need to be convinced to click, read through, share, and
              engage with. Why was the link shared and content created to being
              with, and how did it structure itself to fit its
              content/audience, and why does a particular structure/messaging
              work while others don't?
              
              > The word for all of that is Marketing.
              
              I think that overemphasizes the significance of a 'market'.
              'Market' is used as a metaphor for many things, such as
              'attention market', but also implies commercial, transactional,
              profit-oriented relationships, which don't seem like such strong
              motivations here (though I can't speak for the author). And to me
              your claims seem assume that the author's primary goal is more
              attention - they are in an 'attention market', they do all these
              things with intent to drive more page views.
              
              They could have many other motivations. As a general concept,
              people love to share what they know, sort of like the drive to
              make FOSS. Maybe the author just loves to learn things and the
              blog posts provide an excuse; I've fallen into similar hobbies -
              without regret. Maybe they feel validated, or it relieves stress,
              or it's an escape from a job they hate, etc. There are so many
              possibilities in addition to commerce, attention, or profit.
              
              I do agree that the HN "audience wants to feel smart, and
              believes that they are “too smart to be marketed to”." Those
              are the easiest people to persuade.
       
            tolerance wrote 12 hours 46 min ago:
            I just finished this response to a sibling comment of yours: [1] I
            think it inadvertently touches on some valid points that you raise,
            especially the one about criticizing people within earshot.
            
            > Gwern seems to be onto something about how to engage readers.
            What do you think that is?
            
            I think that people read for different reasons; there are different
            kinds of readers. I think that there’s a dissonance between the
            point that he makes in this article and my perception of the rest
            of his work. That’s all. Of course defending my opinion so that
            it is received in good faith reveals more than I want to be taken
            as an assumption about what I think about Gwern the person, but
            these assumptions are inevitable when we’re talking about writing
            to incite intrigue in other human beings and how writing is
            peculiar form of expression and exchange not just of ideas but also
            of personality.
            
            Some people may read Gwern’s work and find that its informational
            depth satisfies their interests as readers. “Embryo Selection For
            Intelligence” sounds like an interesting topic to me, but not
            interesting enough on its own to make me 1) wait for the page to
            load because the entire page took approximately 13 seconds to to
            yield almost 12MB of data and 2) read it all, in the form what is
            self-described as a “cost benefit analysis” on the issue, which
            makes it seem like more technical/scientifically-driven piece of
            writing as far as what we can expect by way of style. [1] Lots of
            people on HN, I assume, are of the sort who are indeed engaged by
            technically-minded expositions on a subject and if they are at all
            interested in narrative then they reach for fiction writing and may
            even find non-fiction books that attempt to wind narratives as
            wastes of time unless they are immediately entertaining. And
            entertainment is not something that I intend to advocate for. But I
            suspect that there are a lot of readers on HN who view reading as a
            means to an end—the information; and the more the merrier and
            merit-worthy the writing is thought to be.
            
            Gwern discusses a lot of topics. I’m probably sharing my reaction
            to the stuff that I’ve read from him that I think lacks
            personality. If my impression of the dominant literary bloc on HN
            is accurate then maybe I’ve only come across the
            information-dense-but-stylistically-lacking prose served on a
            Xanadu’s sled of a web page sort of work of Gwern's.
            
            It’s been 4 hours. I am yet to come across an "Empires Without
            Farms: The Case of Venice” in his oeuvre.
            
            > If you crack open some of the mustier books about the
            Internet—you know the ones I’m talking about, the ones which
            invoke Roland Barthes and discuss the sexual transgressing of
            MUDs—one of the few still relevant criticisms is the concern that
            the Internet by uniting small groups will divide larger ones.
            
            Loading in 6 seconds and serving a little more than 4MB of content,
            "The Melancholy of Subculture Society” seems like a good
            candidate. [2] [1] < [2] > [2] < [3] >
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=46760312
 (HTM)      [2]: https://gwern.net/subculture
 (HTM)      [3]: https://gwern.net/embryo-selection
       
              mmooss wrote 9 hours 52 min ago:
              That's a great response; thanks. I would guess you are right that
              Gwern particularly appeals to the HN crowd, though that might be
              saying the obvious. Personally - and I don't think my perception
              is somehow superior to anyone else's - I think Gwern's writing
              has a clear voice.
              
              > I just finished this response to a sibling comment of yours:
              [1] I didn't write the parent comment there.
              
              > the entire page took approximately 13 seconds to to yield
              almost 12MB of data
              
              13 seconds doesn't seem like much to me compared to the time
              required to read those pages. I think that objectively, it
              doesn't have any economic impact. But that is relativley slow.
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=46760312
       
                tolerance wrote 8 hours 36 min ago:
                Oops, uhh.
                
                   s/sibling comment of/comment that’s a sibling to
                
                Hope it makes more sense now.
       
                  mmooss wrote 8 hours 29 min ago:
                  Oh I see. Yes, that makes much more sense. :)
       
          ofalkaed wrote 13 hours 48 min ago:
          >David Foster Wallace (on KCRW? Or oft-repeated elsewhere) about how
          he had to come to terms with the purpose of writing not being to show
          off how smart you are to the reader.
          
          He expands on this in his conversation with Bryan Garner (of Garner's
          Modern English Grammar) published as Quack this Way, and I think he
          gets to the core issue, which is that your ideas are not interesting
          to anyone but you; if you are showing off how smart you are, you are
          assuming the reader will find your ideas as important and interesting
          as you do. It is the writer's job to show the reader why they should
          be interested, why they should care.
          
          Infinite Jest is a also a good example of something which goes
          against TFA's point, it opens with a very sterile, impersonal,
          literal and completely disconnected first person narrative, he gives
          us nothing to care about. But it evolves, but he still doesn't give
          us anything to care about, just has the narration turn in on itself
          despite it seeming to have nothing to turn in onto. All he really
          gives us is the suggestion that there is something more than what we
          can see. He gets us interested and curious but I don't think we
          really care at that point.
       
            tolerance wrote 12 hours 3 min ago:
            To his credit and with the exception of mentioning an objective to
            show his smarts off to readers (which I don’t think he wants to
            do anyhow) Gwern informs us that he is assuming that we will find
            what he writes as useful as he does, because his objective is to
            write things that are useful to himself:
            
            > The goal of these pages is not to be a model of concision,
            maximizing entertainment value per word, or to preach to a choir by
            elegantly repeating a conclusion. Rather, I am attempting to
            explain things to my future self, who is intelligent and
            interested, but has forgotten. What I am doing is explaining why I
            decided what I did to myself and noting down everything I found
            interesting about it for future reference. I hope my other readers,
            whomever they may be, might find the topic as interesting as I
            found it, and the essay useful or at least entertaining–but the
            intended audience is my future self.
            
            — < [1] >
            
            We can reconcile this with the purport of the writing of his that
            we’re discussing now—it’s a notice with his future self in
            mind. And we can compare and contrast the above quote and the
            aforementioned piece with some of PG’s writing which I find is
            meant to be public-facing literature at full bloom. [1][2]
            
            I think there’s a difference between 'writing for my future
            self’ and ‘writing with the public in mind’. Howard & Barton
            (1986) would argue that they represent separate stages of the
            writing process and I agree with that and prefer writing that is
            primed for the latter form. [3] I associate the maxim “First,
            make me care” with the latter as well and by-and-large feel like
            Gwern’s writing—that which I’ve come across most
            frequently—is geared toward the former form. Which I’m sure
            serves him well, as well as I’m sure it’s served well to those
            who enjoy his work. I’m yet to determine whether that’s a good
            or bad thing.
            
            As I’ve cited earlier, some consider Gwern's writing to evoke a
            sort of misanthropy. But hey...I’m sure there’s someone else to
            say the same about Paul Graham and his stuff. I’ll withhold
            judgement against the both of them on that matter—for now—lest
            I get caught unprepared to be deemed one myself. [1] < [2] > [2] <
            [3] > [3] < [4] >
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://gwern.net/about#target-audience
 (HTM)      [2]: https://www.paulgraham.com/field.html
 (HTM)      [3]: https://www.paulgraham.com/useful.html
 (HTM)      [4]: https://search.worldcat.org/title/13329813
       
              ofalkaed wrote 10 hours 42 min ago:
              I don't think we need to credit him or reconcile anything, what
              he says is not wrong or hypocritical, it is just his view of what
              makes a good blog post. I disagree with him but the only
              consequence for him is that I won't read his blog unless I feel
              compelled to because I want to join in the discussion on
              somewhere like HN and don't want to be one of those people who
              interjects into a discussion on an article they did not read,
              even if the conversation is clearly about the title and not the
              article or marginally related topics or I simply want to make a
              marginally related comment.
              
              For me, it is the way he presents and develops ideas that
              prevents me from reading, it reminds me of reading a tutorial on
              how to reach his conclusion. Some people probably like the style,
              some probably don't care about the style, and some like me
              struggle to even skim a short post like TFA. But I find a great
              deal of what is on the internet to be difficult to read and think
              nothing of reading a book like Infinite Jest in a week. I am not
              the target audience.
              
              Edit: Fixed some editing weirdness, I think.
       
                tolerance wrote 9 hours 43 min ago:
                We seem to be of like mind on this matter then. I look forward
                to us reconvening the next time Gwern hits the front page and
                we each feel compelled to voice some kind of informed dissent
                on the subject. Dissent probably isn’t the right word here
                because I don’t think either of us actually disagree with
                what he’s saying.
                
                How fun is a conversation once it’s established that both
                parties are in agreement about something in principle? Does one
                probe to be provocative?
                
                I place high expectations on writing that 1) I feel is right up
                my alley because I think I’m already familiar with the topic
                and 2) I’m unfamiliar with but am eager to learn about—it
                sparks my curiosity. Not all writing meets these expectations
                and this is probably why I’m disgusted by the though of using
                LLMs for information about subjects I have a genuine enthusiasm
                for and can care less about doing so for others, at least until
                I can figure out whether I want to know more about it. Then the
                subject becomes forbidden to prompt about.
                
                > For me, it is the way he presents and develops ideas that
                prevents me from reading, it reminds me of reading a tutorial
                on how to reach his conclusion.
                
                My assumption is that this kind of writing exists somewhere
                along the same strand of writing that lends itself to what’s
                expected from some writing in public school (‘Good writing is
                what shows the reader/teacher that you correctly grasped the
                material that was taught to you’); writing that is received
                well by ’The Masses™’ or some in-group (‘Good writing
                is what shows the reader/audience that you’re beliefs are in
                correct alignment with theirs’); something like a
                mathematical proof (a more literal representation of how to
                reach a conclusion if I correctly understand what a
                mathematical proof is); and a well-formed atomic note written
                for private consideration.
       
          rrvsh wrote 14 hours 39 min ago:
          I agree, the citations having the little icons were distracting and I
          had to force myself not to skim. Still though, it's a very
          illuminating article that applies the very simple concept we all
          learned in theory to hook the reader but never really seen explicit
          examples of. I also found the similar pages feature interesting!
       
          davedx wrote 14 hours 39 min ago:
          Everyone's a critic, hey?
       
          Jach wrote 15 hours 32 min ago:
          I think for a lot of people, simply having "Author: Gwern" (or some
          other author they like) is the sufficient bit of information to make
          them care, it's generic on the content. I've read a lot of not very
          stylish writing simply because of who wrote it. Or in other words,
          "Your ideas are intriguing to me and I wish to subscribe to your
          newsletter." Whatever quirks of bad style there are will get a pass
          because I already care -- style is more important when you want to
          reach someone who hasn't heard of you.
       
            tolerance wrote 13 hours 21 min ago:
            I like where you’re heading with this and to a degree I think
            that it leads toward considerations about the personality of the
            author in tow with their writing and writing ability which on its
            head evokes questions about what makes a person, well, personable.
            Which turns this into a sensitive discussion about what one can
            glean about an author’s character traits based on their writing
            style and when the author in question is only a ‘public figure’
            in the eyes of the niche collection of online enclaves who are even
            aware that Gwern exists it becomes tough to candidly critique his
            literary persona with the sort of freedom that one may have when
            talking about say, some guy who’s written for the Atlantic for 30
            years and is further from the spaces where criticisms about his
            work are held.
            
            My criticisms about Gwern’s writing is not meant to be
            taken...ahem...personally in the sense that I don’t want to use
            Gwern as a subject for whatever literary critique I’m trying to
            proffer beyond how useful it is—and is presenting itself—as a
            fine case to help make whatever point I’m trying to make more
            clear about how Writing style is inextricable from and indicative
            of personality or lack thereof. And this is probably a part of what
            makes reading and writing such a profound experience.
            
            One of the most interesting remarks about Gwern’s writing is this
            comment [1]:
            
            > Everything I read from gwern has this misanthropic undertones.
            It's hard to put a finger on it exactly, but it grits me when I try
            reading him.
            
            — < [1] >
            
            While I can't agree with the entirety of `mola’s comment—I
            simply haven’t put that much thought into making as grave of an
            evaluation into Gwern’s character as such a judgement would
            demand, nor am I that interested in deliberating over such an
            evaluation—it still resonates with me as a reader and you’ll
            find in my comment downthread from `mola’s remark that it’s at
            least plausible that an affinity for self-expression and
            intellectualizing about the world doesn’t necessitate an interest
            in the rest of its inhabitants in a way that causes me not to find
            the thesis behind “First, make me care” to be coloured with a
            stroke of irony, considering who’s behind it.
            
            You say "style is more important when you want to reach someone who
            hasn't heard of you.” I agree with that and I reckon that it’s
            still style that forms a non-trivial amount of how you identify
            with ‘who’ the author is once you’ve become familiar with
            they’re work and can set an expectation for why their ideas may
            be worthwhile to engage with in the first place. Again, Paul
            Graham’s writing has a style although no where to the degree that
            Maciej Cegłowski does. You can evince characteristics about each
            of them relative to how and what they write about. You can even
            speculate on ways that their respective personalities could lead to
            friction between them. [2]
            
            When we interrogate the “who” behind “who wrote” we are
            making judgements about the personality of the author and how that
            that makes us interested in their ideas. Today there are various
            non-literary mediums that give us a glimpse at a person’s
            personality with which we can anticipate whether it’s worth
            reading what they write. But if all you go by is their writing then
            how they write is about the only way for you to speculate about
            'who' the author is and what they’re like as a person.
            
            There are probably holes in this line of reasoning but I don’t
            think the lines between writing style, personal appeal and the
            ability to appeal to readers through how you write—effectively
            signaling to your personality in the process!—are as distinct as
            I think you’re portraying them. What’s the opposite of
            orthogonal? Correlated?
            
            To end: Gwern’s writing lacks personality to me. This makes it
            hard to reconcile with the point he’s making in this article
            (which I agree with!) and my perception of his own writing (which
            invariably and perhaps even unfortunately invites speculation into
            any writer’s own personality).
            
            Again, please, Does Gwern have anything that sounds as striking as
            “Empires Without Farms: The Case of Venice” or was that example
            a tacit hat tip to Brett Devereaux’s work? I don’t think the
            guy is a misanthrope but I do sense a wall of text—both
            figuratively and literally—between he and I when engaging with
            his writing. He is evidently well and widely read and despite my
            dislike for the visual form of his website I think that it is still
            a solid technical display of hypertext for personal web design and
            information architecture. But in spite of this all I find that it
            lacks depth, not intellectually but personally. ’Spiritually’,
            if you will. [1] Now you may be able figure out my reasoning for
            the first paragraph re: public figures and criticism. I guess
            that’s this puts me in the camp of those who don’t believe
            that’s possible to separate art from the artist. Discussing one
            commands a look into the other, otherwise why bother with ‘art’
            and ‘artists’ at all?
            
            [2] Those who are familiar with both Graham’s and Cegłowski’s
            writing can take a guess at who once called the other a “big ole
            weenis” in an exchange on this very site.
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=42135302
       
              bee_rider wrote 10 hours 9 min ago:
              > Again, please, Does Gwern have anything that sounds as striking
              as “Empires Without Farms: The Case of Venice” or was that
              example a tacit hat tip to Brett Devereaux’s work?
              
              I don’t quite see the link to Devereaux here. But, if anything,
              I think Devereaux is not at all similar to the writing style in
              the “Empire without farms” thing here. On ACOUP, he just
              bluntly tells you what the plan is and then executes it.  He does
              engaging content and funny stuff, but it is sprinkled throughout
              the text rather than being a gimmicky hook to draw the reader in.
              For example, [1] Starts out with one paragraph about where we are
              in the series of blog posts and a super zoomed out description of
              what the series is about.
              
              Then a paragraph about the fact that he had been planning an
              alternative ordering for the blog posts. If I don’t already
              care, that’s not going to make me care.
              
              Then we finally get a direct no-frills statement describing the
              specific question to be answered in this post. It’s blunt and
              it doesn’t ask a “get ready for a surprise” type question.
              
              I like it. This is a confident and adult writing style. To me,
              
              “Venice ruled half the Mediterranean. And yet… it had no
              farms. How do you have an empire without farms?”
              
              Comes off as an author a trying to convince the reader that they
              have something clever to say. Almost always this is the result of
              worrying too much about style.
              
              IMO, the best way to come up with a clever phrasing is to start
              by writing down a direct version first, to figure out what you
              really want to say. Then, just don’t write a clever phrasing,
              the reader will appreciate your respect for their time.
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://acoup.blog/2026/01/16/collections-hoplite-wars-p...
       
                tolerance wrote 7 hours 32 min ago:
                You’re right. I was just riffing on the implied subject
                matter based on the title of Gwern's imaginary essay and how it
                reminds me of something that Devereaux would write about. In
                asking if he had anything that sounds as striking as the title
                that’s as far as I was taking the link between the two.
                
                The ‘serialized’ voice that Devereaux uses works.
                Especially when you start from the beginning. I only hopped
                around a few posts while browsing his archive, but what I’m
                imagining is from the first post in 2019 all the way until the
                more recent one you shared, is an ongoing conversation. [1] Or
                something like a tour (“Welcome to my collection!”).
                Confident is a good way to describe the style. I like how I
                feel immediately orientated about the subject matter and the
                context surrounding how the writing came about.
                
                Here’s a similar introduction from 2022:
                
                > This week we’re going to start tackling a complex and much
                debated question: ‘how bad was the fall of Rome (in the
                West)?’ This was the topic that won the vote among the
                patrons of the ACOUP Senate. The original questions here were
                ‘what caused the loss of state capacity during the collapse
                of the Roman Empire in the West’ and ‘how could science
                fiction better reflect such a collapse or massive change?’ By
                way of answer, I want to boil those questions down into
                something a bit more direct: how bad was the fall of Rome in
                the West?
                
                — < [1] >
                
                I deliberately sought out the introduction of an essay that was
                the beginning of a series instead of one that is...Part IVb.
                Whoever is reading Part IVb of the history of "the heavy
                infantry of the ancient Greek poleis" is probably too invested
                and enthused not to care about meta-commentary about
                alternative sequencing for the series. The quote above is from
                a Part I entry and I can’t say that the meta-commentary that
                similarly starts this off makes me less interested in it. The
                intrigue is set early on and with confidence. If I didn’t
                care before, well I do now. I sort of feel compelled to care. I
                have at least a weeks worth of lectures to catch up on about
                the fall of Western Rome and there’s apparently a senate’s
                worth of similarly-invested readers who have already
                deliberated that the severity of its collapse is of utmost
                importance this week.
                
                `Jach madę a comment elsewhere about how “style is more
                important when you want to reach someone who hasn't heard of
                you.” [2] The thing is that in Devereaux’s case most of the
                essays that I’ve found begin with this ‘casual
                professorial’ sort of tone. I’m meandering and I don’t
                want to conclude all of this with a point that misinterprets
                your own to forge the upper-hand in an argument that doesn’t
                exist.
                
                Referring back to the sample “Farm” essay:
                
                > Venice ruled half the Mediterranean. And yet… it had no
                farms. How do you have an empire without farms?
                
                I don’t think that this is cleverly phrased or that it's a
                set up for something clever later on. At least I don’t think
                so if we’re using the word in a way that evokes strokes of
                ingenuity and not with a negative connotation, like ‘trite’
                or ’slick’. It may be ‘clever’ in a sense like “This
                sounds like the intro from a page straight of a pop history NYT
                best seller”. I could go with that. Yeah, it is indicative of
                something I probably wouldn’t care to read not only because
                it comes across as ‘clever’, but more so unsophisticated.
                Let us bear in mind however, that this is a softball
                introduction used to make a point. It looks like neither of us
                are convinced that it does so successfully anyhow.
                
                Devereaux’s second post, and first essay on acoup.blog start
                off:
                
                > Evaluating armor designs, especially in works of fantasy or
                speculative fiction, can be a tricky business.    Often times, we
                can see a design and know something is off about it, but not
                quite what.  Or alternatively, fans and internet commentators
                will blast this or that design in TV or a movie simply because
                it does not conform to their own narrow vision of what armor is
                ‘supposed’ to look like.  I’ve seen fictional examples of
                gambesons, muscle cuirasses, mirror-plates and pectorals all
                mocked by self-appointed expects – and these are armors that
                were worn historically!
                
                > So how can we do better assess if armor ‘makes sense,’
                even when it is a non-historical design?
                
                From what I could find, this is the sole departure from the
                ’serialized’, ‘casual professorial’ voice I described
                earlier. What would you call this? I think it lacks the air of
                sophistication and in media res meta-commentary that the rest
                of his writing begins with. To `Jach’s point it does appear
                to stylistically serve as an introduction of its own to the
                author himself.
                
                Informative is what I’d call it. And there are so many
                different ways to inform the reader depending on the
                circumstance.
                
                > Venice ruled half the Mediterranean. And yet… it had no
                farms. How do you have an empire without farms?
                
                This is uninformative. Clever? If information is to be turned
                like a trick, for sure. [1] < [2] > [2] < [3] >
                
 (HTM)          [1]: https://acoup.blog/2022/01/14/collections-rome-decline...
 (HTM)          [2]: https://acoup.blog/2019/05/03/blog-overview-a-collecti...
 (HTM)          [3]: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=46759159
       
              Jach wrote 11 hours 15 min ago:
              It's risky business inferring personality from writing samples
              because people can and do adopt different styles in their writing
              depending on circumstance and whimsy. As an exercise, read
              something from James Mickens, and try to imitate his style for
              some other technical topic. It's actually not that hard, at least
              to get within throwing distance, refinement is always possible.
              He probably doesn't write family letters or most emails or
              technical documentation that way though. Once you have a broader
              sample from an author across different topics and genres, and
              even sampling on short-form writing or interviews, you can be on
              better footing for guessing what their personality is like
              without having to go through the effort of getting to know them
              as an individual (which is otherwise the usual constraint) but
              you still risk being quite over-confidently wrong.
              
              Certainly you're right that aspects of writing including style
              come to be expected over time by an audience, and if what were
              supposedly fixed things suddenly change it's usually not
              pleasant. Though to a fresh reader, the new version might be far
              preferable. Some authors could use an editor, some authors could
              tell their editor to back off more.
              
              In the similar space of personalities we're discussing, I'd also
              bring up patio11, whose writing I've sampled for a long time here
              and elsewhere (I still think of him as the bingo card guy). I've
              mostly enjoyed it but I would not mind at all if his
              question-anticipating style and
              stating-things-precisely-but-also-precisely-vaguely-so-as-not-to-
              create-any-chance-at-liabilities style went away. The content
              overcomes the style and matters more, which I'd like to think is
              usual for me and how I evaluate things anyway.
              
              The misanthrope comment is pretty funny. I'd disagree, especially
              considering how gwern has handled crazy person emails, but also
              because I'm somewhat misanthropic myself and figure gwern is
              probably less so, but who knows, it's a pretty bold thing to
              claim of someone else you don't know personally one way or
              another. I think what might be there for people to pick up on is
              a sense of superiority but in the form of distance, illustrated
              by this anonymous quote: "If I am superior to others, if I am
              above others, then I do not need others. When I say that I am
              above others, it does not mean that I feel better than them, it
              means that I am at a distance from them, a safe distance." (But
              again perhaps not, I just like that quote and is how I've felt of
              myself at times, more when I was younger.)
              
              The opposite of orthogonal is non-orthogonal, the components are
              not completely independent, but it's left unstated how dependent
              they then are. (You could also say the inner product is non-zero
              if talking about vectors. There are many numbers that are
              non-zero.) I'd agree that there is something of an artist in an
              artist's works, but it's again risky (if you care about not being
              wrong too much anyway, or whatever consequences can come from
              being wrong) to speculate what exactly that something is,
              especially if all you have is the work. People all too often read
              way more into things than what is actually there. The author
              themself is a more reliable source for what parts of themselves
              are in something. (I'm reminded of Tolkien's hatred of allegory
              that he talks about in the preface. His letters go into further
              detail about what of the artist is or is not in art,
              intentionally or unintentionally. You could say the art itself
              talks about it too -- e.g. the Ring by nature of its maker is not
              like other mere tools which can be used for either good or evil.)
              For your first footnote, then, I'm in the camp of separation, and
              it's perfectly fine to talk of one without talk of the other, and
              for little of an artist's being to leak through. It's also
              healthier, at least I think it's unhealthy how many people seem
              to work themselves into a frenzy about something about the artist
              that prevents them from looking at the art more on its own. And
              again, if you're not using outside sources, what you can infer
              about someone purely from the art, purely from the fact that they
              made something rather than nothing, and this particular something
              rather than something else, is more limited than what some people
              imagine. "The Ass Goblins of Auschwitz" is a work of
              bizarro-fiction, I think there are plenty of people who would
              wish the author were killed just for admitting to having such
              thoughts by fact of putting them to paper. I don't actually know
              anything about the author, if there was any blurb about him in
              the book I've forgotten it over the actual book, but in any case
              I'd bet he's a fine guy in day to day life and not deserving of
              any trouble. (I am rather certain it's a he, though I don't
              recall his name.)
              
              I also think it's fine to talk of the art and artist together,
              but it's not necessary, and usually less interesting, fruitful,
              or certain. But a sometimes-fun exercise in some fiction analysis
              can be: find the author's self-insert character. (That
              presupposes there is one, there sometimes isn't.) How sure are
              you that you've got it right? You should probably consult some
              information about the author themselves outside the art itself.
              And even then, is it a "complete insert", or a partial one, or
              one made of past regrets or future ideals or alternative paths,
              but not present bits?
              
              While we're tossing light criticism about other people around in
              public, or as I'd put it just sharing opinions and viewpoints
              (this is not structured enough to be criticism), what comes to
              mind first for the three writers brought up is this: Maciej is
              funny even when he's wrong, pg is just insufferable when wrong,
              gwern is rarely wrong. I liked pg's older writing more, at some
              point he fell off and neither his tweets that occasionally
              surface to me nor his newer essays that I've bothered to read
              (last one I believe was "Good Writing") have left much of an
              impact or held my interest content-wise or style-wise. I haven't
              kept up with Maciej in tweet or other form since 2017 or so
              because I thought his content and style were repetitive and
              became boring (and wrong about things in ways that didn't invite
              counter argument or correction). My exposure to gwern's writing
              was IRC and LW comments from many years back, I've only read a
              fraction of his longer form work on his site but occasionally
              I'll read new things he puts out because he's still occasionally
              writing about new and interesting things. His style has never put
              me off, but sure, it's not routinely funny like I remember
              Maciej, and it lacks some sharpness and brevity that old-pg had.
              I still think it has personality, and a particular gwern-like
              personality even when it's in "classic style" mode that is shared
              by many other writers, but that might just be familiarity
              especially with his shorter form words.
              
              And I still find gwern funny at times. This bit of fiction, for
              instance, has some amusing bits: [1] I wonder, does it satisfy
              your query of something as intriguing as "Empires Without Farms:
              The Case of Venice"? There are several ways that link can "make
              me care", though the web page layout can make it awkward. Is it
              the "clippy" in the URL, the official title "It Looks Like
              You’re Trying To Take Over The World", the one-sentence summary
              that just tells you it's a fictional short story about something,
              the two-sentence summary below that which says the same with a
              tiny bit more detail, the picture of Clippy, or the first lines
              of the actual text: "In A.D. 20XX. Work was beginning. “How are
              you gentlemen !!”… (Work. Work never changes; work is always
              hell.)"? Those first lines are distinctive video game references
              that even if one hasn't played the games, if one has been on the
              internet enough during a particular time then they'll likely ring
              a bell. The recognition of such signals is going to either act
              like crack ("One of us!") and draw the reader further in, or act
              as a repellent (quirk chungus) and bring forth a groan if not
              abandonment; I've been both kinds of reader for the same
              references. Meanwhile others won't get the references at all,
              it's just weird. Whether including such references indicates
              something meaningful about the author's personality directly,
              rather than just them being aware of the shibboleths and making
              use of them to attract and entertain a certain audience, is hard
              to say. Fans often end up with "don't meet your heroes" kinds of
              feelings when they over-empathized with their inferred
              construction of someone and thought they were part of the tribe
              rather than just making use of the tribe's signals.
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://gwern.net/fiction/clippy
       
                tolerance wrote 10 hours 7 min ago:
                I appreciate your take on misanthropy. I returned to the topic
                in another comment in a way I think you may find apt: < [1] >.
                
                Additionally I appreciate the extent to which our perceptions
                on literature differ. This was an enlightening exchange. 
                In an attempt to retain decorum between us I will withhold
                speculation on the character of (Mr?) Cameron Pierce whose work
                you made mention of.
                But it's tough to resist. And boy, am I confident about it.
                
                Thanks also for the pointer to James Mickens. And if I may ask,
                do you have a reference for where I may find Tolkien's remarks
                on the relation between the artist and his art?
                
                I'm going to make a gross fusion out of two points you made
                that I enjoy in conjunction:
                
                > And again, if you're not using outside sources, what you can
                infer about someone purely from the art, purely from the fact
                that they made something rather than nothing, and this
                particular something rather than something else, is more
                limited than what some people imagine. [...]
                Those first lines are distinctive video game references that
                even if one hasn't played the games, if one has been on the
                internet enough during a particular time then they'll likely
                ring a bell. The recognition of such signals is going to either
                act like crack ("One of us!") and draw the reader further in,
                or act as a repellent (quirk chungus) and bring forth a groan
                if not abandonment; I've been both kinds of reader for the same
                references. Meanwhile others won't get the references at all,
                it's just weird. Whether including such references indicates
                something meaningful about the author's personality directly,
                rather than just them being aware of the shibboleths and making
                use of them to attract and entertain a certain audience, is
                hard to say. Fans often end up with "don't meet your heroes"
                kinds of feelings when they over-empathized with their inferred
                construction of someone and thought they were part of the tribe
                rather than just making use of the tribe's signals.
                
                I think how we experience the phenomenon you describe in the
                second paragraph that I've appended above—the final one in
                your full response—is where we differ.
                
                I can't help but use references like the ones you described
                above as data points to infer the personality of the author.
                It's an innate mental process that occurs concurrent to
                whatever else I think about while reading their work. And the
                world is filled with such data points even beyond ones that the
                author intentionally invites.
                
                I'm probably more likely to expect that these references (that
                I consider to be outside sources; this may be irresponsible to
                you) are indicative of the nature of the author either directly
                or indirectly—that there is at least some genuine influence
                behind the reference of certain concepts, beliefs and
                shibboleths—because I don't read fiction the same way that I
                read non-fiction. Which is to say that I don't actually read
                fiction at all.
                
                I do appreciate how certain fiction serves as literary
                representations of the ideas that the author has about the
                world (whether they're his own or those of other's that he
                wants to bring attention to) that they otherwise wouldn't
                express through non-fiction. So I do mine the work of some
                fiction authors for that kind of insight and nothing more;
                because my objective is to comprehend the diverse ways that
                people perceive life and the lives of others. Because of this I
                probably tend to interpret the effect of a piece of literature
                more seriously than others; in search of more intimate and
                perhaps more disquieting evaluations.
                
                As you mentioned, sometimes the author is just trying to
                attract an audience. So that’s not to say that all references
                are worthy of as strong of a consideration that I’m
                describing. Maybe the fun part of this kind of work is vetting
                for authenticity—for better or worse—all things considered.
                
 (HTM)          [1]: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=46760901
       
                  Jach wrote 8 hours 34 min ago:
                  It's good of you to beware immature judgment lest you so be
                  judged.
                  
                  I didn't have a particular letter in mind but the topic comes
                  up at various places in The Letters of J.R.R. Tolkien,
                  especially in his remarks about sub-creation. I decided to
                  ctrl-f my digital copy and I'll point you to Letter 213 for a
                  direct remark. It's 3 paragraphs, here's the first:
                  
                  > I do not like giving 'facts' about myself other than 'dry'
                  ones (which anyway are quite as relevant to my books as any
                  other more Juicy details). Not simply for personal reasons;
                  but also because I object to the contemporary trend in
                  criticism, with its excessive interest in the details of the
                  lives of authors and artists. They only distract attention
                  from an author's works (if the works are in fact worthy of
                  attention), and end, as one now often sees, in becoming the
                  main interest. But only one's guardian Angel, or indeed God
                  Himself, could unravel the real relationship between personal
                  facts and an author's works. Not the author himself (though
                  he knows more than any investigator), and certainly not
                  so-called 'psychologists'.
                  
                  I'm in agreement with Tolkien here.
                  
                  I wonder if you've ever read A Modest Proposal? If not: [1]
                  But if so I still wonder if you can put yourself in the frame
                  of mind of not having read it and not knowing anything about
                  it, and thus recreating an approximation for how you would
                  read such a piece for the first time. What do you make of it?
                  What do you make of Dr. Jonathan Swift? Do you have enough
                  historical knowledge to put yourself in 1729 and interpret it
                  as a person from that era, instead of our modern cynical and
                  irony-poisoned one?
                  
 (HTM)            [1]: https://www.gutenberg.org/files/1080/1080-h/1080-h.h...
       
                    tolerance wrote 7 hours 20 min ago:
                    > It's good of you to beware immature judgment lest you so
                    be judged.
                    
                    A dear reminder best expressed by the second Caliph of the
                    Islamic state Umar ibn al-Khattab رضي الله عنه:
                    “Bring yourself to account before you are taken to
                    account.”
                    
                    I think I’ve come across both that quote of Tolkien’s
                    before and I’m also vaguely familiar with A Modest
                    Proposal, to the degree that after reading the subtitle I
                    was reminded that it’s satire. I’m not sure how this
                    will affect my reading of it but I intend to assign myself
                    both Letter 213 of Tolkien’s letters and the whole of A
                    Modest Proposal with the questions you presented in
                    relation to it as homework! Thanks.
                    
                    Edit: I also just found your blog and am subscribed to your
                    RSS feed. “Hard Labor” is a nice read. It’s hard to
                    come across this level of introspection that doesn’t go
                    out of its way to appeal to an audience. Well I’m reading
                    your stuff now. And I am judging you too! (Half joke).
       
            eichin wrote 14 hours 52 min ago:
            Yeah, but even that isn't going to make me care about why Gwern is
            obsessing over Venice.    Part of that is that I follow Overly
            Sarcastic Productions on youtube and "Blue" did a vastly better job
            of expressing/performing "I'm excited about Venice, and in a couple
            of minutes you will be too!" - an advantage of the medium and of
            their chosen style, for reaching someone like me who isn't all that
            compelled by European history.
            
            (Yes, I get that it was an example to make a point about a writing
            style; one of the risks of really concrete examples is bouncing off
            of the example itself :-)
       
          wetpaws wrote 16 hours 37 min ago:
          Gwern has hands down one of the worst blogs, readability wise, ever
          created on the internets. His writing style can be hit or miss too.
       
            orthoxerox wrote 5 hours 30 min ago:
            I agree, but I think I know why I personally have this opinion. I
            don't like reading hypermedia, and Gwern is all about hypermedia.
            
            Hypermedia is fine when you're reading reference material, like
            Wikipedia. We've all done [1] , but at some point you just learn to
            tune out the hyperlinks.
            
            When reading an article written by a single human, I want it to
            have a well-defined linear structure. I don't even like footnotes
            or pull-out quotes. Gwern likes to put a "blind" hyperlink or two
            in literally every sentence. Here's what an "orthoxerox-optimized
            Gwern article" would look like:
            
            - blind links to literal Wikipedia: gone, I can search for more
            information myself  
            - blind links to external websites: please just pull the relevant
            information into the body of the article or, if that's impossible,
            spend a sentence on why you want me to click it  
            - blind links to other pages on the website: again, if it's some
            relevant information, please just pull it into the body of the
            article; if it's self-promotion, I can live with links like these
            if they are the only blind ones left, but the "Similar links" box
            under the article is already there
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://xkcd.com/214/
       
            bigDinosaur wrote 7 hours 8 min ago:
            Gwern does actual research into usability, and that's the reason
            there aren't any ads on Gwern.net (which alone makes it far from
            the worst for readability, I mean have you used the internet
            without an ad blocker on the median blog??).
            
            Anyway, it's readable for me, and I quite enjoy it, so perhaps you
            just aren't the target audience. That doesn't matter at all, you
            don't need to read Gwern at all.
       
            jefftk wrote 12 hours 6 min ago:
            There are definitely less readable blogs, even restricting to ones
            that aren't intentionally hard to read.  For example: [1]
            (Disclosure: written by my kid, who was just shy of 7yo then)
            
            Personally, I like Gwern's style and aesthetic a lot, and don't
            have trouble reading his stuff.
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://www.lilywise.com/amusement
       
            1dom wrote 16 hours 3 min ago:
            I think that's a little extreme to say it's one of the worst. It's
            definitely a different style to a lot of blogs, but I like how much
            information is spread across the site. It's satisfying to explore
            on a desktop.
       
        oncallthrow wrote 17 hours 5 min ago:
        This didn’t make me care
       
          jfengel wrote 16 hours 52 min ago:
          Agreed, because it's not very actionable advice. At best it provides
          some examples of what not to do.
          
          The example leads to one classic bit of writing advice: tell only the
          very most important things and omit everything else. Start the story
          as late as you can and end it as early as possible. This applies to
          nonfiction just as much as to fiction.
       
        firefoxd wrote 17 hours 8 min ago:
        I wrote my story and titled it, "My experience at work with an
        automated HR system". I sent it to a few friends, only a couple of them
        read it.
        
        A week later, I renamed it to "The Machine Fired Me". That seemed to
        capture it better. The goal wasn't to make it click bait, but it was to
        put the spoiler, and punch line right up front. It blew up!
        
        I had just read Life of Pi, and one thing I like about that book is
        that you know the punch line before you even pick up a copy. A boy is
        stuck with a bengal tiger in a boat. Now that the punch line is out of
        the way, the story has time to unfold and be interesting in its own
        merit. That's what I was trying to recreate with my own story.
       
          chasemp wrote 9 hours 20 min ago:
          Great example, thanks for sharing.
       
          NathanaelRea wrote 12 hours 17 min ago:
          Reminds me of Veritasium's recent videos, really driving that initial
          hook and maintaining the viewer's attention. He had an explanation
          video about it which explained how people who would be interested in
          something like "the Lorenz equation" probably don't know what it's
          called, so it might be more accurate to phrase it in terms that
          someone would search for or initially peak their interest.
          
          And I think it fits neatly with making people care first. I want to
          learn more about the machine that fired you, that's more the start of
          a narrative arc. It's almost like I have more trust that you will
          make it interesting, since you put a little more work up front.
       
          ChrisMarshallNY wrote 13 hours 39 min ago:
          That's the LinkedIn "broetry" formula.
          
          LI only shows a sentence as a teaser, and good "broets" have learned
          to write a good teaser line.
       
            nicbou wrote 6 hours 10 min ago:
            This is such a perfect term for it. Thank you for starting my day
            with a chuckle. I feel validated.
            
            More about this weird phenomenon:
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://fenwick.media/rewild/magazine/dead-broets-society-...
       
          stephenbez wrote 16 hours 4 min ago:
          "The Machine Fired Me" is one good hook.  I found the original post
          and its good:
          
 (HTM)    [1]: https://idiallo.com/blog/when-a-machine-fired-me
       
        arjie wrote 17 hours 12 min ago:
        This insight is what caused the rise of the clickbait headline and its
        predecessors in eras past. You need a hook or there's no point reading
        the tale.
       
        svilen_dobrev wrote 17 hours 12 min ago:
        aaand, how to apply this technique to a CV?
        
        prepending a one-liner-about-some-feat that might interest that
        particular company, before the usual cv afterthat?
        
        hmm. made me think..
       
        zkmon wrote 17 hours 15 min ago:
        > When writing, first, make the reader care, one way or another.
        Because if I am not hooked by the first screen, I will probably not
        keep reading—no matter how good the rest of it is!
        
        Keeping the reader glued to the screen is not the primary goal of
        writing. This artificial goal pollutes the connection between writer
        and reader. It makes them buyer and seller and rewards sales tactics.
        You don't write for the reader. You write for yourself first. Readers
        sometimes, just happen to appreciate it about as much you do.
       
          GeoAtreides wrote 14 hours 59 min ago:
          > Keeping the reader glued to the screen is not the primary goal of
          writing [...] You don't write for the reader.
          
          This is contrary to all writing advice I have read, from Robert Olen
          Butler to John Gardner. Sure, the natural geniuses might write from
          themselves or their friends (like Kafka) and because they're geniuses
          the writing is good, but most people aren't geniuses, so they need to
          keep the reader and its needs firmly (VERY firmly) in their minds.
          
          Speaking of John Gardner, here is a quote about writing that
          perfectly encapsulates what the job of writer is:
          
          "A true work of fiction does all of the following things, and does
          them elegantly, efficiently: it creates a vivid and continuous dream
          in the reader’s mind; it is implicitly philosophical; it fulfills
          or at least deals with all of the expectations it sets up; and it
          strikes us, in the end, not simply as a thing done but as a shining
          performance."
          
          ..."Make me care" is part of the "expectations it sets up". "Make me
          care" begins with the first word of the first chapter, continues with
          the first paragraph and the first page and, through the first scene,
          it eases the reader into the "vivid and continuous dream" from which
          the author should never jolt awake the reader.
       
          derektank wrote 16 hours 57 min ago:
          The primary goal of writing is communication. If you are trying to
          convey information, you need someone to actually sit down and read
          it. Most of the time, this isn’t a problem, you’re writing for
          someone you have a pre-existing relationship with and they want to
          read what you have to say, whether that be a friend, a coworker, or
          your future self.
          
          Problems arise when you move from one:one, to one:many communication.
          If you are trying to pass knowledge on to people you have no prior
          relationship with, you do need to attract their attention in a sea of
          options. If you actually have something important to say that other
          people need to hear, it does nobody any good for you to go unnoticed.
          In those circumstances, I don’t see anything wrong with taking
          Gwern’s advice.
       
          BeetleB wrote 17 hours 2 min ago:
          > Keeping the reader glued to the screen is not the primary goal of
          writing.
          
          This is common advice in English classes and it predates the World
          Wide Web (and likely the Internet).
          
          Hook them in the first few sentences or lose them.
          
          And yes, of course, it does depend on who the intended audience is.
          You wouldn't do it in The New Yorker.
          
          > You don't write for the reader. You write for yourself first.
          Readers sometimes, just happen to appreciate it about as much you do.
          
          Depends very much on the medium. It's definitely not true that most
          professional writing is written for the author's sake. It is for an
          audience. Read books on writing and you'll often find the advice to
          cut out things if they won't interest the reader - no matter how
          valuable it is to you.
          
          I myself struggle with this. Some years ago, I took a trip to my
          childhood home in another country after being separated for decades.
          Almost none of my friends from the time have been there in decades
          either. I made notes during the trip, and when I got back I started
          writing what I saw, and shared it with my friends who grew up with
          me. How various neighborhoods have changed. Anecdotes from my
          childhood tied to those places. And a lot more.
          
          I got 30% done, and then decided to hold off sharing till I'd written
          the whole thing. I now have a first draft. It's the size of a proper
          book. It contains a lot of stuff that is of value to me, but likely
          not to most of the (small) audience. I know if I share it with them,
          chances are high no one will read it.
          
          On the one hand, the stuff I wrote is highly valuable to me - it's
          become an unintentional memoir. But on the other hand, I do want to
          share quite a bit with my friends, and I know they'll value it if
          they actually read it.
          
          I'll either have to cut a lot out, or write two versions
          (impractical).
          
          The point being that even when you have a very limited audience, it
          is important to care about them and sacrifice your needs to an
          extent.
       
            zkmon wrote 6 hours 12 min ago:
            Never cut out stuff that you felt important to include. Just forget
            the reader. The content you write should reflect you, not the
            reader. It's your expression. Don't make it a sales pitch, or a
            reflection of average reader's taste.
            
            I get scared when an author is talking to me, the reader. I stop
            reading when they pretend to be aware of my context. Things like
            "So you are reading this book because you want to learn about AI"
            sounds very cheap.
            
            Also I hate when the actors on TV suddenly start talking to the
            viewer about what they did and why did etc. Disgusting.
            
            Audience want to observe the performers, not converse with them.
            Your best performance comes out when you are not much aware of the
            audience. Like a child playing, ignoring people around.
       
          ofalkaed wrote 17 hours 6 min ago:
          I agree with your first assertion but not so much on the rest. There
          is more than one reason to write and for many it is about
          communication, they have something they want to express and you would
          be wise to consider your reader if that is your goal.
          
          Hooking the reader with the opening page is swinging to the other
          fence of having a terrible opening page that no one will get through,
          generally not good to swing to the fences. I think the writer should
          be honest and upfront with the reader, the opening pages should be
          representative of what is to come, they should represent the whole
          and not just the beginning.
       
        pcrh wrote 17 hours 17 min ago:
        The hook was great, but article was mediocre. I glazed over at the
        mention of LLMs in the second paragraph, skimming the article through
        to the end didn't improve things.
        
        If your readers now care, don't disappoint them...
       
        tines wrote 17 hours 25 min ago:
        I have often thought that all good fiction is mystery. This is
        obviously an overstatement, but I think it’s not too far off. Humans
        are mystery solvers. If I don’t have a compelling mystery to
        solve—something like the “what’s going on beneath the surface in
        this town?” that David Lynch does so well—when I’m reading your
        book or watching your tv show or playing your game, I’m usually out
        unless I have a strong prior interest (which simply means that I
        brought my own mystery).
       
          Frotag wrote 16 hours 15 min ago:
          I'm usually the opposite. Mystery feels like the characters, the
          narrator, etc are all being intentionally obscure, for no reason
          other than to pad page count and incite drama.
          
          I prefer stories that are either about evoking feelings (adventure,
          romance, slice of life) or about exploring ideas / what-ifs (scifi,
          fantasy). And ideally stories at the extremes of this spectrum. Maybe
          I've read too many but ones in the middle tend to be too cliched to
          hook me.
       
            tines wrote 9 hours 47 min ago:
            It could definitely be my systems-oriented writing. May I ask what
            your profession is? I’m a software engineer.
       
        treelover wrote 17 hours 29 min ago:
        "When writing, your first job is this:
        First, make me care."
        
        It really depends on who the audience is...
       
          bravura wrote 17 hours 23 min ago:
          Understanding your audience is your first job as a writer or
          communicator.
          
          Speaking to them and making them care is job two.
       
            wtetzner wrote 10 hours 51 min ago:
            Ideally you wouldn't need to make them care. Just give them enough
            information up front for them to determine if they care.
       
        isoprophlex wrote 17 hours 29 min ago:
        This article succeeded spectacularly in making me want to know all
        there is to know about medieval Venice, that's for sure.
       
          skybrian wrote 17 hours 1 min ago:
          It's really too bad it's not a quote from an actual book.
       
        treetalker wrote 17 hours 34 min ago:
        Zeroth, proofread.
       
          swiftcoder wrote 17 hours 19 min ago:
          Eh, if your hook is interesting and your writing is generally solid,
          I'm not about to begrudge a few typos
       
            jfengel wrote 16 hours 50 min ago:
            True, but any re-reading will let you pick up a lot of the typos.
            If you write it once and ship it unedited, then you weren't
            interested, and the reader likely won't be either. Typos clue the
            reader into that early.
       
        bondarchuk wrote 17 hours 34 min ago:
        I think "Just… start with the interesting part first" is quite
        different, and actually much better advice than "make me care". I'm
        more than done with stupid hooks and attention grabbing techniques,
        just plainly and honestly state at the outset what the point is of what
        will follow.
       
          NegativeK wrote 13 hours 45 min ago:
          I now try to follow something like bottom line up front (BLUF) when
          I'm trying to quickly communicate something and respect someone's
          time: the most important, actionable detail first with details
          expanding as you read more.
          
          I first heard that it has a standard in an email from someone
          ex-military; they started the email with "BLUF: blah blah blah".
          Turns out the military had (has?) it as a standard for emails. Go
          figure.
          
          Before then, I remember someone asking Adam Ragusea (Youtube cooking
          channel) why he gives away the point of the video at the very
          beginning. Ragusea explained that he was previously a journalism
          professor, and he refused to bury the lede.
          
          I don't watch cooking content anymore, but I've remained impressed
          that he was able to have a Youtube career while avoiding that
          manipulate-the-audience behavior to drive stats.
       
            bondarchuk wrote 2 hours 3 min ago:
            So basically TL;DR :)
       
          marginalia_nu wrote 16 hours 33 min ago:
          Yeah, there are two basic schools.
          
          1. Broadcast what the article is about to let the interested readers
          find it easier
          
          2. Trick people into reading as much of the article as possible
          through any means
          
          The first makes sense if you want readers.  The second makes sense if
          you're counting page impressions.
       
            sothatsit wrote 11 hours 11 min ago:
            This is fairly uncharitable. The goal is not to trick people into
            reading, it is to motivate them as to why they should read. It is
            more about highlighting the most interesting part of your article
            to tell people why they should spend the time. You still have to
            deliver on your promises.
            
            I feel like Gwern’s example is quite illustrative of this point.
            Just framing the content differently makes you more motivated to
            jump into it, even if you’re reading about the same content as
            before.
       
              bondarchuk wrote 2 hours 55 min ago:
              I don't know. It's almost universally assumed to be true that
              "making someone want to read on" is inherently good but IMO it's
              not. Why is it good to be "more motivated to jump into it"? If a
              plain description and some context does not motivate you, it
              would be better to spend your time elsewhere.
       
        skybrian wrote 17 hours 35 min ago:
        Suppose you fed this article into an LLM, along with whatever other
        documents you had, and asked it to come up with some good candidates
        for opening sentences? And picked one, and let it take it from there?
        
        I assume you'd get a mess, but it might be an interesting mess.
       
        makeitrain wrote 17 hours 37 min ago:
        I can’t click on any links on pages (the header works).
        
        Using brave on iPhone.
        
        Firefox and Safari works…
       
        OtherShrezzing wrote 17 hours 40 min ago:
        This was quite a good article. It could have been excellent if it
        answered its own hook somewhere the piece though.
        
        I came away not having a resolution to the hook - violating the
        articles second principle.
       
        simonw wrote 17 hours 41 min ago:
        This is something I find fascinating about TikTok: on that platform you
        literally get a few seconds to catch the attention of your audience
        before they skip to the next video.
        
        You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever because
        people will get bored of it - including if that hook is heavily used by
        other accounts.
        
        This makes TikTok a fascinating brute-force attack on human psychology,
        with literally millions of people all trying to find the right hooks to
        catch attention and constantly evolving and iterating on them as the
        previous hooks stop being effective.
       
          wodow wrote 20 min ago:
          > You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever...
          
          I would be interested in a study on how long popular accounts do use
          their one hook -- or set of hooks, or rotate them...
       
          duxup wrote 50 min ago:
          > You can't just find one hook that works
          
          Is that true?
       
          psychoslave wrote 3 hours 40 min ago:
          I wonder what proportion of people find things like TikTok, YouTube
          shorts, and even Twitter for the text counterpart, absolutely
          repulsive. It's not even disdain as in "I'm too good for this", more
          like some people can't stand the view of a spider I guess.
          
          And other things like HN can definitely hook my mind.
       
          Cthulhu_ wrote 4 hours 8 min ago:
          This is leaking to loads of other media too - movie trailers have
          started with some quick action shots, then BIG text saying "trailer
          starts now". Like a trailer to a trailer. Which is released after a
          teaser for a trailer. They even have recurring sound effects (vine
          boom sounds, but movie trailer edition where every action event
          (explosion, punch, scene change) is accentuated with a distinct drum
          boom sound effect, often in time with the dramatized remix of
          recognisable music). I hate it lol.
          
          As for tiktok / other short video clip format content, one trend I've
          seen is to start the video with the conclusion (e.g. someone falling
          over), then starting with the buildup. Since these videos are played
          on loop anyway, they trick the viewer into thinking they missed the
          buildup.
       
            sevenseacat wrote 2 hours 8 min ago:
            How I hate the trend of videos like YouTube shorts to almost show
            the punchline of the video at the start before the full video.
       
              Nextgrid wrote 1 hour 14 min ago:
              It's not limited to Shorts, even normal longform videos have had
              this crap for years now. I hate it too - fortunately SponsorBlock
              can take care of this, they have optional categories you can
              enable beyond just sponsors, including the "hook".
              
              I was looking into making an automatic detector for this kind of
              thing (basically detect if anything in the first ~30 seconds
              repeats itself later in the video, and if so mark it) but my DSP
              skills aren't up to the task (and turns out LLMs are useless for
              these kinds of novel tasks).
       
          jonnybgood wrote 4 hours 12 min ago:
          > You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever
          because people will get bored of it
          
          Isn't that the most followed user on TikTok Khaby Lame (his facial
          expression)? Looks like he just sold his company for $900M.
       
            Cthulhu_ wrote 4 hours 5 min ago:
            Damn, I'm in the wrong industry.
            
            I think it's different for tiktok (as a non-tiktok user so take
            this with a huge grain of salt lmao), people don't watch one
            creator's videos one after the other, they get put in the big soup
            of clips that people scroll through for sometimes hours a day. And
            a lot of that is people sticking to one formula, because for many,
            the predictability is comforting / puts them in the tiktok brain
            off frame of mind.
            
            Which isn't a new phenomenon - lots of people have "comfort shows"
            on e.g. Netflix, often the studio series with long seasons like
            sitcoms. They're comfortable because they often maintain a similar
            energy or formula over their run time, and missing parts of it
            (like current-day episodic films) isn't a big issue.
       
          galkk wrote 6 hours 2 min ago:
          > You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever
          
          Hmm. I feel exact opposite. Most of successful channels that i see
          are using exact same formula/structure/often even style time and time
          again.
       
          PeterStuer wrote 8 hours 25 min ago:
          "You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever"
          
          Biology tends to disagree.
       
          amelius wrote 15 hours 12 min ago:
          Except the hooks only attach to the lizard brain while the rational
          brain just sits there with a palm in its face.
       
            nsbk wrote 5 hours 39 min ago:
            There is no lizard brain. The "triune brain" theory has been
            debunked by modern neuroscience for years.
       
          klustregrif wrote 15 hours 30 min ago:
          > You can't just find one hook that works and reuse it forever
          
          That seems to be exactly what succesfull acounts are doing. They go a
          year or two creating content in a theme and then find that one hook
          that makes people stay a second to see what heir content is and then
          their entire personality and content becomes that one hook repeated
          until naseum and no matter what they do to try to escape it it's
          impossible since they don't control their content exposure newcommers
          will aways be flooded in a repeat storm of that same hook, and people
          who get tired will move on no matter what. So the only reliable way
          of trying to "pivot" to anything else is to create a new account, but
          that's going to get you back at the start with no guarentee that
          you'll have another hit in the next 2 years, so they just accept
          their fate as "the cucumber guy" or "the funny outfit girl" and then
          ride that as far towards the sunset as possible.
       
            alexdobrenko wrote 1 hour 13 min ago:
            yes except all of this stuff...fundementally sucks, right? its why
            influencers generally don't become actors. there's very little
            depth to it. Versus for example Hank and John Green who sure, they
            have good hooks, but they also have depth?
            
            idk can't tell if this is me hoping or coping
       
            epiccoleman wrote 7 hours 37 min ago:
            This definitely seems true to me, from my limited short content
            usage. I try to avoid getting sucked into the feed (Youtube Shorts
            is the one I have used), but if I do find myself scrolling through
            the morass of clips from Shark Tank or Family Guy [1], the one guy
            I'll almost always stop for is FunkFPV, who just does a duet on
            clips of stupid "hacks" and incidences of dumb stuff happening in
            factory / warehouse / construction settings.
            
            He's just a blue-collar type guy who is mildly funny when
            critiquing the stupidity of, say, a guy walking up a badly placed
            ladder with a mini split condenser on his shoulder - but it's a
            niche that for whatever reason I enjoy, and I don't think I'd
            remember his handle if it wasn't for his very specific niche.
            
            Interestingly enough [2] I've noticed a number of other creators
            seem to have sprung up in this niche and will occasionally find a
            video of some other blue-collar-lookin-dude doing the same schtick.
            I doubt FunkFPV is the first (in fact he sort of reminds me of an
            "AvE-lite") to tap this weird market, but he's my touchpoint, at
            least.
            
            [1]: Yes, it is embarrassing that the algorithm has determined that
            these are likely to garner my attention
            
            [2]: it's actually not really interesting because almost nothing on
            the topic of short-form video is actually interesting by any
            reasonable definition of that word, so this is just a turn of
            phrase
       
            TeMPOraL wrote 8 hours 5 min ago:
            Does TikTok even have persistent personalities of this type? I
            thought a big part of the service was its recommendation algorithm
            that will keep recommending you other new stuff, not just reruns of
            the same influencers.
       
              Aryezz wrote 3 hours 45 min ago:
              It's both. Since most videos are a couple minutes long at most,
              and a TikTok doomscrolling session can last for hours, the
              algorithm can show you all the new videos you haven't seen of
              accounts you seem to enjoy (or are following), and a ton of new
              stuff as well.
       
            rrvsh wrote 14 hours 38 min ago:
            Yeah, I instantly disagreed with that point in the comment you
            replied to - TikTok's algorithm seems to reward sticking to your
            niche.
       
          ctoth wrote 16 hours 22 min ago:
          Attention is all you need, after all.
          
          On its own, this is interesting. But when you consider that people
          actually need attention for things like their jobs, the road, their
          children, &c... it starts to sort of look a bit like a superweapon.
       
            Cthulhu_ wrote 4 hours 2 min ago:
            And when propaganda is injected into it - subtly, through many
            channels and methods - it becomes worse. I'm confident that the
            western world's rightward shift is down to targeted social media
            campaigns. It doesn't help that said social media stopped checking
            for fake news and bent the knees to said rightward shift, because
            money.
       
          kmoser wrote 16 hours 28 min ago:
          > This is something I find fascinating about TikTok: on that platform
          you literally get a few seconds to catch the attention of your
          audience before they skip to the next video.
          
          Before TikTok, the YouTube "hook" was to choose the right image
          thumbnail that would entice people to click on your video. There was
          a time when YouTube didn't let you select a thumbnail; they would
          automatically select an image from a certain time in the video, so
          producers adapted by filming their videos so the most visually
          engaging moment came at that time.
       
            rossant wrote 9 hours 43 min ago:
            Fifteen years ago, I ran a YouTube channel with hundreds of obscure
            French videos about pediatrics and parenting. One of them suddenly
            attracted massive attention worldwide, especially from Pakistan and
            Indonesia. According to the stats, 99% of the viewers were male.
            Millions and millions of views. For months, it sat in the top five
            French videos on YouTube. Ad revenue went through the roof, like
            three figures per day, for months, from that single video. None of
            the others on the channel saw anything remotely similar. It was
            baffling.
            
            Then I understood why. The automatic thumbnail generator had picked
            a frame from the exact middle of the two-minute video. It showed a
            close-up of a newborn heel prick test: a nurse firmly holding the
            baby’s heel and pricking it to collect a drop of blood for
            routine postnatal genetic screening. The thumbnail frame looked
            like a skin-colored cylinder grasped by a woman’s hand.
            
            Thankfully, the flood of comments, expressing disgust and horror at
            a medical procedure on a newborn after viewers had expected
            something entirely different, did not prevent the algorithm from
            enthusiastically recommending that thumbnail to a significant
            fraction of humanity.
       
              sizzle wrote 6 hours 54 min ago:
              That’s really actually hilarious and would probably get your
              account flagged by AI for showing obscenity or something
              nowadays.
       
          ericmcer wrote 16 hours 48 min ago:
          There almost is no hook, the hook is that the time investment for
          each video is so small your brain doesn't even need to think about
          whether it should watch or not.
       
            Cthulhu_ wrote 3 hours 57 min ago:
            And the other factor is I think the "rat pulling a lever" thing.
            
            A rat is in a lab, pulls a lever, treat comes out, nom. Pulls
            again, treat comes out, nom. Pulls again... no treat. Pulls again,
            treat comes out, nom. This goes on, 10 pulls with no treat, but
            sometimes something comes out so the rat keeps going. You get the
            idea.
            
            This is a lot of social media. You end up scrolling through a lot
            of shit, adverts and subtle propaganda, passively absorbing it
            until you get rewarded with something you genuinely enjoy and get
            the good hormones from.
       
          andai wrote 16 hours 51 min ago:
          >TikTok [is] a fascinating brute-force attack on human psychology
          
          Security researcher once told me that he sees social media as a
          distributed hacking attempt on the human mind.
          
          I think it's a genetic algorithm. You try random stuff and when
          something works you clone and mutate and crossbreed it.
       
            noduerme wrote 1 hour 19 min ago:
            Attention-seeking is indeed the original genetic algorithm.
       
            tstrimple wrote 15 hours 34 min ago:
            Isn't this pretty much the definition of a meme? I mean before meme
            just became synonymous with funny cat videos. Like the actual
            meaning of the word.
       
              mr_toad wrote 3 hours 52 min ago:
              Dawkins original definition was an idea that replicated
              unchanged, in an analogy to a gene, which is essentially a unit
              of DNA small enough to replicate unchanged.
       
                rcxdude wrote 3 hours 34 min ago:
                mostly unchanged (or rather, unchanged most of the time).
                Mutations still happen and are necessary for evolution.
       
              komali2 wrote 14 hours 36 min ago:
              Snow Crash explored this much more literally, supposing that
              there may be memes so powerful they can function basically as
              magic spells that reprogram people's brains.
       
                Root_Denied wrote 5 hours 47 min ago:
                The SCP Foundation pages[0] have something similar, a danger
                classification for "Memetic Hazards" which are basically
                informational viruses that affect memory, cognition, and
                perception.
                
                [0] -
                
 (HTM)          [1]: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/understanding-memetics
       
                TeMPOraL wrote 7 hours 54 min ago:
                My favorite example is actually one that I believe could be
                true[0]: self-reinforcing cycles of human conflict, that
                resemble the life cycle of a parasite. From an old (2014)
                SlateStarCodex essay[1]. Some of it is going to be
                controversial read today[2], so I'll just give you the relevant
                "money quote" from the end:
                
                What would it mean for a meme to have a life cycle as
                complicated as toxoplasma?
                
                Consider the war on terror. They say that every time the United
                States bombs Pakistan or Afghanistan or somewhere, all we’re
                doing is radicalizing the young people there and making more
                terrorists. Those terrorists then go on to kill Americans,
                which makes Americans get very angry and call for more bombing
                of Pakistan and Afghanistan.
                
                Taken as a meme, it’s a single parasite with two hosts and
                two forms. In an Afghan host, it appears in a form called
                ‘jihad’, and hijacks its host into killing himself in order
                to spread it to its second, American host. In the American host
                it morphs in a form called ‘the war on terror’, and it
                hijacks the Americans into giving their own lives (and tax
                dollars) to spread it back to its Afghan host in the form of
                bombs.
                
                From the human point of view, jihad and the War on Terror are
                opposing forces. From the memetic point of view, they’re as
                complementary as caterpillars and butterflies. Instead of
                judging, we just note that somehow we accidentally created a
                replicator, and replicators are going to replicate until
                something makes them stop.
                
                --
                
                [0] - In whatever sense models are "true", i.e. a nice way to
                describe reality, that's succinct and has good predictive
                power, or something. [1] - [1] [2] - Which is not the same
                thing as saying it turned out wrong.
                
 (HTM)          [1]: https://www.slatestarcodexabridged.com/The-Toxoplasma-...
       
                  adolph wrote 17 min ago:
                  Vervaeke makes a claim of parasitism explicit in the Meaning
                  Crisis series.
                  
                    We call this Parasitic Processing because it's like a
                  parasite in that it 
                    takes up life within you, and it takes life away from you!
                  It causes you to 
                    lose your agency. It causes you to suffer. And here's
                  what's important. This 
                    capacity for your cognitive brain to be self organizing,
                  heuristic using, 
                    complexify, to create complex systems and functions with
                  emergent abilities, 
                    has a downside to it.
                  
                    This is a complex, self-organising, adaptive system! If you
                  try and intervene 
                    here the rest of the system reorganizes itself around your
                  attempted 
                    intervention. It can adapt and preserve itself as you tried
                  to destroy it. 
                    Why? Because it's making use of the very machinery by which
                  You adapt, and 
                    make use of the things that are trying to destroy You!
                  
 (HTM)            [1]: https://www.meaningcrisis.co/ep-13-awakening-from-th...
       
                  iterateoften wrote 4 hours 12 min ago:
                  Also the most successful parasites have defense mechanisms to
                  protect it. The process of radicalization and cultural
                  heritage in general is a type of defense to make sure the
                  parasite survives.
       
                  andrei_says_ wrote 6 hours 33 min ago:
                  For more ideas - One can definitely see multigenerational
                  patterns of abuse and trauma as self reproducing parasites.
       
                shawn_w wrote 12 hours 57 min ago:
                See also John Barnes' Century Next Door books, where "memes"
                are basically computer viruses that jump to running on human
                brains, not just silicon chips. The results are... not pretty.
       
          BiteCode_dev wrote 17 hours 5 min ago:
          Pretty sure it destroys something in you as well. So many context
          changes with no relation whatsoever and regular hooks that give you a
          pinch.
          
          We haven't evolved for that. Our brain is trying to figure out a
          narrative between two things following each other. It needs time to
          process stuff. And there is so much shock it can absorb at once. So
          many "?!" and open loops in a day.
          
          I made a TikTok account to at least know what people were talking
          about. After 3 months, I got it.
          
          And I deleted it.
          
          I felt noticeably worse when using it, in a way that nothing bad for
          me, including the news, refined sugar and pron, ever made me feel.
          The destruction was more intense, more structural. I could feel it
          gnarling.
          
          In a way, such fast feedback is good, because it makes it easy to
          stop, while I'm still eating tons of refined sugar.
       
            rmunn wrote 11 hours 8 min ago:
            Thirty years ago, I read a book called Amusing Ourselves to Death
            by Neil Postman, in which he made very similar points about
            broadcast television. I don't remember all his points, but I
            vividly remember how talked about how you'll be watching a news
            story about something awful, maybe an earthquake in which hundreds
            of people died, and then with practically no warning you'll be
            hearing a happy jingle from a toothpaste commercial. The
            juxtaposition, he said, was bad for the human mind, and was going
            to create a generation that couldn't focus on important things.
            
            I suspect that the rapid-fire progression of one one-minute video
            after another does something similar, and is also equally bad for
            you.
       
              MonkeyClub wrote 3 hours 49 min ago:
              The same is true with the "In other news..." technique of seguing
              to the next story: its end result is overall desensitization and
              passive consumption.
       
              noahjk wrote 8 hours 52 min ago:
              I've noticed that I can read or see something very emotionally
              engaging - something that really resonates with me, so much so
              that I'm maybe even choking up over it - and while I'm still
              having that emotional response, move onto the next post. I almost
              always have a moment of meta-reflection that scares me - why
              wasn't I content to just sit there and process these big
              emotions? How is the dopamine part of my brain so much more
              powerful than even the emotional part, that it forces me to
              continue what I'm doing rather than just feeling?
       
          dyauspitr wrote 17 hours 14 min ago:
          It’s so addictive but so soul destroying. I feel dirty after
          spending time on that platform. The term brainrot fits perfectly.
       
            munificent wrote 14 hours 40 min ago:
            Wait until a generation of people who have been mainlining that
            since infancy while their thought patterns were still being formed
            becomes old enough to vote.
       
              saghm wrote 10 hours 31 min ago:
              Oh no, will they elect a president who primarily operates in
              ragebait, heavily uses social media, and has no meaningful
              attention span for anything outside of receiving direct praise?
              Good thing we have such enlightened voters right now who would
              never for someone that!
       
            something765478 wrote 16 hours 57 min ago:
            Yeah, I had to get rid of my youtube plus subscription because I
            was getting too addicted to the shorts.
       
            jaredsohn wrote 17 hours 3 min ago:
            I've started using these platforms for learning (stretch exercises,
            argentine tango patterns/musicality I might want to lead, etc) and
            am finding the experience to work better in those kinds of
            situations. Agree it can be brain rot if using it for
            entertainment, politics, etc.
       
              jaredsohn wrote 15 hours 38 min ago:
              To respond to everyone at once -
              
              I have experience and teachers so I'm not solely relying on these
              videos. I use the short videos as a fast discovery of what's out
              there and I'll sometimes watch long videos afterward. LLM sites
              also work well for this discovery and I use that sometimes but it
              is a bit more work from me (which sounds strange to write re: AI)
              because I have to type out what I want instead of relying on
              algorithms that use data collected about me.
              
              I use Facebook Reels (rather thank TikTok) which show me stuff
              anyway after I click on a link shared by friends so having it
              show me things relevant to learning seems like the best option
              here in case I click on next video.
       
              dyauspitr wrote 16 hours 22 min ago:
              Why short form though? I’ve always learned much better from
              long form, more comprehensive videos. Or I guess to put it
              another way I don’t believe I’ve ever learned anything
              besides quick hacks on reels/shorts/tiktok. Not even quick guitar
              licks.
       
              xandrius wrote 16 hours 29 min ago:
              Honest question: why wouldn't you simply search for exactly the
              same things but on longer format platforms such as YouTube?
       
                TeMPOraL wrote 7 hours 35 min ago:
                TikTok isn't about searching, it's about tuning the algorithm
                to find just the things you want, without necessarily being
                explicit about what you want.
       
              ericmcer wrote 16 hours 45 min ago:
              It is still doing the same thing, the dopamine hit is just
              feeling like you learned something instead of seeing something
              funny/shocking/etc.
              
              The idea you can gain any kind of actual experience/knowledge
              about a thing through a series of 30s clips that are competing
              with millions of other 30s clips to grab you is folly.
       
          tombert wrote 17 hours 24 min ago:
          This is part of why I hate TikTok so much.
          
          I recently started doing SiriusXM again a lot.    The reason I do this
          is actually specifically because it gives me less choice than
          something like Spotify or YouTube Music.
          
          A lot of time when I do the autoplay of YouTube Music, if I don't
          like the song in the first 15-20 seconds, I skip it to something
          else.  I eventually realized that a lot of songs that I end up really
          liking require you listening to the entire song to come together. 
          The inability to skip to the next song on SiriusXM forces me to
          listen to the song, and I've found a ton of songs that I likely would
          have otherwise skipped with anything else.
          
          I feel like with TikTok, we're effectively training ourselves to
          ignore things that don't immediately grab our attention.
          
          Maybe this is just my "Old Man Yells At Cloud" moment though.
       
            cpt_sobel wrote 1 hour 46 min ago:
            > less choice than something like Spotify or YouTube Music
            
            For the same reason (plus curiosity of what people are listening to
            in weird places) I recently switched to Radio Garden [0], highly
            recommend it (not affiliated)
            
            [0]
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://radio.garden
       
            sznio wrote 4 hours 4 min ago:
            I went back to CDs because the friction of having to stand up, walk
            to the player and change the disc is enough to stop me from
            skipping songs every few seconds.
            
            For discovering new music, I go to the flea market every so often
            and buy some random discs. Some are unlistenable, but a lot are
            alright. I found New Mind[1] this way and really loved it.
            
            [1] 
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jonathan_Sharp#New_Mind
       
            ErroneousBosh wrote 16 hours 45 min ago:
            > I recently started doing SiriusXM again a lot. The reason I do
            this is actually specifically because it gives me less choice than
            something like Spotify or YouTube Music.
            
            No, I think you're right.
            
            I'm old enough to have swapped pirated cassettes of whatever was
            doing the rounds in high school. I remain convinced that Appetite
            for Destruction can only be listened to the way it was intended to
            be heard, if it's been copied onto a ratty old TDK D90 that's been
            getting bashed around in your schoolbag for months by your mate's
            big brother who has the CD and a decent stereo.
            
            There's a lot of stuff I listened to that I probably wouldn't have
            if I'd had the selection that's available on streaming services.
            When you got a new tape, that was Your New Tape, and you listened
            to it over and over because you hadn't heard it a thousand times
            yet. Don't like it? Meh, play it anyway, because you haven't heard
            it a thousand times yet.
            
            I got into so much music that's remained important to me because of
            a chance tape swap.
            
            Maybe Spotify et al needs instead of unskippable adverts,
            unskippable tunes that are way outside your usual range of tastes.
            "Here have some 10,000 Maniacs before you go back to that R'n'B
            playlist!"
       
              tombert wrote 15 hours 27 min ago:
              Yeah, similar for me; when I was a teenager I would buy a CD
              specifically I liked a single on the radio and put it in my car. 
              I would be too lazy to take it out and listen to something else,
              so I'd listen to that CD dozens and dozens of times, and I would
              grow to appreciate the non-single songs a lot, very often more
              than the song I even bought the CD for.
              
              The non-singles are generally a lot less "radio-friendly", almost
              by definition, so a lot of artists were more willing to try stuff
              that is a little less immediately-appealing, and there are a
              bunch of albums I have basically memorized now because of that.
              
              With Spotify and YouTube Music, there's an infinite number of
              songs to choose from and as a result you never have the same
              excuse to listen to the same songs over and over again.  I'm not
              necessarily saying it's "worse", just that I miss the way it used
              to be.
       
            squigz wrote 17 hours 15 min ago:
            Check out KEXP and SomaFM. KEXP in particular is a great way to
            discover new music that you might not normally listen to. [1]
            
 (HTM)      [1]: https://www.kexp.org/
 (HTM)      [2]: https://somafm.com/
       
              Cthulhu_ wrote 4 hours 0 min ago:
              Also adding Radio Paradise, apparently one of the first online
              radios ( [1] ). That said, it does have a skip (and pause)
              mechanism, so if you really don't like something you can skip to
              the next one.
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://radioparadise.com/
       
              keyringlight wrote 16 hours 57 min ago:
              I'd say streaming radio in general is low profile in how it lets
              you discover new things. I use the search/directory built into
              foobar2000 or apps like radiodroid, but there are sites like [1]
              for the web. It's an interesting and low cost way to find things
              you wouldn't otherwise be exposed to and likely curated by
              whoever is running the station. What really stood out to me is
              how different countries or regions have their own tastes, or at
              least are likely to be playing something different to local
              broadcasts.
              
 (HTM)        [1]: https://www.radio-browser.info/
       
                bsder wrote 13 hours 49 min ago:
                The problem I have with streaming radio is that it seems to be
                caught rehashing rather than discovering.
                
                For example, I like SOMA's Underground 80s, but I also want to
                hear new artists in the same vein.  I haven't found any
                streaming stations that are actively good at curating like
                this.
                
                Where are the streaming stations that play Smiths and
                Smithereens but also play Blossoms and Johnny Marr's new stuff,
                for example?
       
                  squigz wrote 13 hours 15 min ago:
                  Yeah, that's why I specifically called out KEXP for this, as
                  they do lots of live shows, themed segments, etc, that really
                  do enable discovery.
                  
                  Unfortunately you're quite right about Soma (and probably
                  other streaming radio) - but I imagine licensing new music
                  can be difficult/expensive.
       
        huhkerrf wrote 17 hours 50 min ago:
        "First, make me care" is exactly right. But I also know that anytime
        you have narrative non-fiction on here, someone without fail argues
        that the author didn't get straight into the details.
       
          furyofantares wrote 15 hours 9 min ago:
          My personal distaste for typical narrative presentations of
          interesting information is how often the first interesting details
          come 4-5 paragraphs in and then are slowly peppered from there.
          Really doesn't seem at odds with the advice here which can easily be
          applied to the opening sentence or paragraph, and title.
       
          acc077877 wrote 17 hours 34 min ago:
          Someone may have already been curious about the topic beforehand.
          I’m guessing they already have some kind of itch or curiosity. For
          example, someone who is interested in reading a dense technical
          textbook that gets straight into the details likely has a preexisting
          question waiting to be answered, which is why they care. That’s
          what motivates them to keep reading, even when the material jumps
          directly into the details
       
          sublinear wrote 17 hours 34 min ago:
          This is why good writing on the web is broken up into multiple posts
          split by concern, and with links to the others at the top of the
          article.
          
          The real problem is when they SEO the shit out of it and replace
          those links with irrelevant trash meant to steal your attention and
          people only want to share the "make me care" posts.
          
          The writers stop bothering even posting details when they have them.
          They bury the lede because it's what the "make me care" crowd forces
          them to do.
       
          some_furry wrote 17 hours 41 min ago:
          Know your audience: Technical people want the details.
          
          Most people aren't technical.
       
       
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