Subj : Re: I'm still waiting for somebody to offer constructive criticism To : comp.programming,comp.lang.java.programmer,comp.lang.lisp From : rem642b Date : Wed Aug 17 2005 03:50 pm > From: "Phlip" > The first few sentences should "hook" the readers, and make them > "care" about the story. I have no skill in this area, and there's no available source of free help in this area. Accordingly I'll have to skip over this suggestion. Linkname: Why WAP inactive? URL: http://www.rawbw.com/~rem/WAP/WhyInactive.html > In your case, you start with negative complaints about yourself, like > this post. "In the first place" and "briefly" are complaintful. OK, I've changed that now. See if it looks better. > and "stopped work soon after beginning" & "cruddy" are negative and > self-abasing. http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=self-abasing&db=* Lowering or humbling one's self. Saying that I stopped work on that project because I lacked the resources necessary to continue, is factual, not what you say. Saying that AT&T services is cruddy is my person opinion based on suffering beeping from incoming text-message spam about once every two or three minutes and spending several hours per day for several days on customer support trying to get them to shut down the incessant beeping, all to no avail. I hope somebody sues AT&T for all the spam they've sent out, at $1000 per spam, hundreds of billions of dollars per day they owe, and puts AT&T out of business, because I hate that fucking company for multiple reasons. Do you honstly consider my hatred of AT&T to be "humble"? Howso? > Then, readers have trouble getting started without at least > expository verbiage about what WAP is. I turned my first mention of WAP into a link to suitable WAP-p.r. > I used to think that Free Software emulators for WAP were available. I don't have any net access such that it'd be possible to correctly emulate a small cellphone screen. Piping small-screen Web pages through a VT100 (fixed-pitch single-font test) would not give a proper idea what a WebPage would look like rendered properly on a cellphone screen, and IMO would not be worth even trying. > you seem to complain that without a cell phone with good "service" > (signal? tech support?) you can't continue to experiment with WAP. Without any cellphone whatsoever, nor any other way to render WAP output to look as it would on a cellphone, indeed I can't do any meaningful experiments in that medium. > And the reason you didn't whip out your computer science credentials > and _write_ a WAP emulator are..? Because I don't have access to any system on which it would be possible to render Web output in any way similar to how it'd appear on a cellphone. "person opinion" should read "personal opinion" .