X-Google-Language: ENGLISH,ASCII X-Google-Thread: f996b,76a9fa9b36377cdd X-Google-Attributes: gidf996b,public X-Google-ArrivalTime: 2002-07-27 07:28:05 PST Path: archiver1.google.com!news1.google.com!newsfeed.stanford.edu!news-spur1.maxwell.syr.edu!news.maxwell.syr.edu!newsfeed.icl.net!newsfeed.fjserv.net!newsfeed.freenet.de!fu-berlin.de!uni-berlin.de!213.242.128.42!not-for-mail From: "Joaquim G�ndara" Newsgroups: alt.ascii-art Subject: Re: Nerd Boy, episode 255 Date: Sat, 27 Jul 2002 16:25:58 +0200 Lines: 70 Message-ID: References: NNTP-Posting-Host: 213.242.128.42 X-Trace: fu-berlin.de 1027780083 34094710 213.242.128.42 (16 [102694]) X-Priority: 3 X-MSMail-Priority: Normal X-Newsreader: Microsoft Outlook Express 6.00.2600.0000 X-MimeOLE: Produced By Microsoft MimeOLE V6.00.2600.0000 Xref: archiver1.google.com alt.ascii-art:18525 "llizard" skrev i meddelandet news:iuh3ku0hbi4p441b1rtpjoi1opb7jl3fl6@4ax.com > In article , "Joaquim > G�ndara" wrote: > [snip] > > The only thing you Oh yeah? Fine! > > ever do is heckle me. I've had enough > > I've had enough! of -you too-! > > ,,, ` , > > '.. OO ~-- > > .||. <||> ->>- > > _________ || _________ bb _________ |\ _____ > > > [snip] > >Did I mention that Tenacious D rocks > [snip] > > This seems so out of character for Mandy. I would have thought her > response would have been an uncaring "What? Oh... Okay... Bye." > > But then perhaps you'd have to revise the third panel as well. Hmm, I might be guilty of the age-old "author to audience dialogue" mistake. I guess I simplified to get the pacing I wanted. However, your line sounds too much like Mandy feels feeble and defeated. The only thing you ever do is heckle me. I've had enough! Whatever! ,,, ` , '.. OO ~-- .||. <||> ->>- _________ || _________ bb _________ |\ _____ That might do it, but I'm still not satisfied with it. > While I understand that you like the "two seconds later" voice over, > it kind of takes away from the flow. Without the voice over, we really > would get the sense of the immediate segue from Nerdboy's thrill of > success to his anguish. No. I think that wouldn't work at all; it feels too much like Nerd Boy's line just continues into the next. This is my impression of that. ..Thank you, Fan Boy! She's gone FOREVER now! ... , OO -\\. dd Which makes NB's line in the third panel seem sarcastic. It's just not as clear without the voice over, which indicates a slight pause. > ___ ?? (I wonder what "Tenacious D" is...) > _/ |===%^, > |_____| __\/> > --- == > > [_ejm_] __>,^ > | | //| | It's a folk rock band.. or something. It's a kind of two man comedy act slash rock band combo. -- OO Joaquim G�ndara | Official Nerd Boy site: .||. | http://nerdboy.port5.com (UK) bb jg | http://nerdboy.xepher.net (US)